唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Also correct minor grammar (e.g. 'it relieves my stress') and avoid filler phrases like 'you know' and 'like'.

範例: Yes, I love singing because it helps me relax and lift my mood. For example, when I sing after a long day, I feel calmer and less stressed, so I usually sing for about 20 minutes to unwind.

建議: Answer directly and avoid contradicting yourself. Use correct tense ('learned' or 'learnt') and give a concise reason with a specific detail. Limit to one or two supporting sentences and include a linking word.

範例: No, I have never taken formal singing lessons. I haven't enrolled because I'm not confident in my voice, so I prefer practising alone at home before I consider a class.

建議: Give a clear direct response and a brief explanation with a linking word. Replace vague phrasing with specific details (e.g. 'for relaxation' -> 'to relax at home'). Keep it to two sentences maximum.

範例: I don't usually sing for other people; I sing mainly to relax at home. For instance, I often sing quietly while cooking or after work to reduce stress.

建議: Avoid repetition and unclear phrasing. Start with a clear statement, then qualify it briefly using a linking word (e.g. 'However') and give a specific example of when singing helps or doesn’t. Use correct collocations ('enjoy music', 'cause stress').

範例: Yes, singing can bring happiness to many people. However, some people dislike music or find certain songs stressful; for example, loud or sad music might upset someone rather than comfort them.

× 'Yes, I really love singing because it's really fantastic and it makes me calm and you know, like whenever I sing I feel really fantastic, happy and really enjoy and it relieve my stress.'

✓ 'Yes, I really love singing because it's fantastic and it makes me calm. Whenever I sing, I feel very happy and I really enjoy it, and it relieves my stress.'

'really' is overused and some adjective/adverb choices are awkward; 'really fantastic' is informal and repetitive, 'enjoy' should take an object ('enjoy it'), and 'relieve' needs third-person singular agreement 'relieves'. Suggestions: reduce repetition by using stronger adjectives selectively, include necessary objects after verbs, and ensure verb forms match the subject.'

× 'No, I have never learn how to sing.'

✓ 'No, I have never learned how to sing.'

'have never' requires the past participle; 'learn' is base form while the correct past participle is 'learned' (or 'learnt'). Suggestion: use present perfect with past participle after 'have/has'.'

× 'Yes, I really love singing, but I have never learned about, you know, like singing classes or something like that.'

✓ 'Yes, I really love singing, but I have never taken singing classes or anything like that.'

'learned about' is awkward here; native speakers say 'take singing classes' or 'been to singing classes'. Also 'or something like that' is informal; replace with 'or anything like that'. Suggestion: use the verb 'take' with 'classes' and prefer clearer phrasing.'

× 'Because I don't really feel confident in my voices and my singing ability.'

✓ 'Because I don't really feel confident about my voice and my singing ability.'

'voices' is incorrect plural for a person's single voice; use 'voice'. Also preposition 'in' is less natural than 'about' in this context. Suggestion: use singular 'voice' and 'confident about' or 'confident in' followed by skill (e.g., 'confident in my singing ability').'

× 'So yeah, that's why I like singing.'

✓ 'So yeah, that's why I like singing.'

This sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. Included to confirm subject-verb agreement is fine.'

× 'I don't want to sing for anyone because I just think for my relaxation and for my stress like to reduce myself.'

✓ 'I don't want to sing for anyone because I sing for my relaxation and to reduce my stress.'

Original sentence has poor word order and awkward phrasing ('think for my relaxation', 'stress like to reduce myself'). Suggestion: use clear purpose clauses: 'I sing for my relaxation' and 'to reduce my stress.' Keep infinitive forms for purpose.'

× 'So yeah for one.'

✓ 'So yeah, for myself.'

'for one' is informal and ambiguous here; the student likely means 'for myself' to indicate personal use. Suggestion: use 'for myself' or 'just for myself' to be clear.'

× 'To people, yes, uh, singing can bring happiness to people, but not to everyone because some of the people don't like singing and like they even feel more stressful when they hear a song and music.'

✓ 'Yes, singing can bring happiness to people, but not everyone, because some people do not like singing and may even feel more stressed when they hear songs or music.'

Issues: redundant phrases ('to people' and 'to people' repeated), informal fillers ('uh', 'like'), wrong comparative adjective 'more stressful' (should be 'more stressed' to describe people), 'a song and music' is awkward; use 'songs or music'. Suggestions: remove redundancy and fillers, use correct adjective 'stressed' for feelings, and pluralize 'songs' or use 'music.' 'May' clarifies possibility.'

× 'So yeah, people can bring happiness to people, but only the ones who really enjoy in music.'

✓ 'So yes, singing can bring happiness, but only for those who really enjoy music.'

Original repeats 'people' and misuses 'enjoy in music' (correct is 'enjoy music' or 'enjoy listening to music'). Also the subject is unclear: singing, not people, brings happiness. Suggestion: remove repetition and use correct verb-object structure 'enjoy music' or 'enjoy listening to music.' 'Those' is better than 'the ones.''}]}