唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve pronunciation, grammar and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, avoid filler words (“uh”), correct verb forms and vocabulary (use “singing” and “shy/embarrassed”), and limit to 2–3 supporting sentences. Use linking words like “because” to explain reasons and give a brief specific example.

範例: No, I don't like singing. I prefer listening to music because I once forgot the lyrics at a school performance, which made me feel very embarrassed. Since then, I avoid singing in public.

建議: Make the answer more natural and cohesive: begin with a direct response, then give clear, specific reasons using linking words (e.g., “because,” “so”). Correct tense and word choice (learned, focused, interests). Keep it within 3–4 sentences and avoid fragmented phrases like “Recall my childhood.”

範例: No, I have never learned to sing. In my childhood I focused on my studies and sometimes danced, so I didn't have time or interest in singing. As a result, I never took any singing lessons.

建議: Answer directly and use correct pronouns and concise phrasing. Use linking words (e.g., “because”) and specific details about who and why. Correct vocabulary: “joyful” or “enjoyable,” and use plural pronouns consistently. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

範例: I would like to sing for my close friends when we celebrate Christmas together because it would make the party more festive. I enjoy performing Christmas carols for them since it brings a warm, joyful atmosphere.

建議: Clarify vocabulary and grammar: use “singing” and correct verb forms (“pay to go to a live show or concert”). Start with a clear opinion sentence, then give 1–2 specific reasons using linking words like “because” or “for example.” Avoid run-on sentences and vague phrases like “circumstances.”

範例: Yes, I believe singing can make people happy because songs often evoke memories and emotions. For example, I enjoy going to live concerts because the music and atmosphere lift my mood and bring people together.

× No, I don't like seeing, uh, actually, I prefer to listen to music rather than seeing a song. Uh, in my primary school, I once, uh, forget it, the lyrics, uh, I think it's very humiliated and ashamed. Uh, so I unwilling to.

✓ No, I don't like singing; actually, I prefer to listen to music rather than sing. In primary school, once I forgot the lyrics, and I felt very humiliated and ashamed, so I was unwilling to sing.

Multiple issues: incorrect verb form 'seeing' should be 'singing' (wrong word), 'rather than seeing a song' should be 'rather than sing' (parallel structure). 'Forget' should be past 'forgot' (past tense). 'It' in 'forget it, the lyrics' is unnecessary. 'I think it's very humiliated and ashamed' uses incorrect adjectives and reflexive feeling—use 'I felt very humiliated and ashamed'. 'So I unwilling to' needs auxiliary and verb: 'I was unwilling to sing'. Suggestion: use correct verb choice, maintain tense consistency (past for past events), and include necessary auxiliaries and correct adjectives for feelings.

× No, I never learned how to sing. Recall my childhood. I concentrate on studying and dancing occasionally. I didn't have time to spend on singing and I didn't have interest to learn.

✓ No, I never learned how to sing. Recalling my childhood, I concentrated on studying and only danced occasionally. I didn't have time to spend on singing, and I wasn't interested in learning.

Errors: 'Recall my childhood' is wrong form—use 'Recalling my childhood' or 'Looking back on my childhood'. 'Concentrate' should be past 'concentrated' for past time frame. 'Dancing occasionally' is okay but better 'only danced occasionally' for clarity. 'I didn't have interest to learn' should be 'I wasn't interested in learning' or 'I didn't have an interest in learning'. Suggestion: keep past tense consistently for past events and use correct participle forms.

× Actually, I want to sing for my close friends who we always celebrate the Christmas together, so I want to sing the Christmas song to her. It's always very joy and enjoyment I guess.

✓ Actually, I want to sing for my close friends with whom I always celebrate Christmas, so I want to sing a Christmas song for them. It's always very joyful and enjoyable, I guess.

Problems: incorrect relative clause and pronoun 'who we always celebrate the Christmas together' should be 'with whom I always celebrate Christmas' or 'who I always celebrate Christmas with'. 'The Christmas song to her' mismatches singular/plural and pronoun: should be 'a Christmas song for them' to match 'friends'. 'It's always very joy and enjoyment' mixes noun forms; use adjectives 'joyful and enjoyable' or 'brings joy and enjoyment'. Suggestion: match singular/plural pronouns with antecedents, use proper relative clauses, and choose correct adjective forms.

× Yes, I think seeing can bring happiness to people. Even though I don't have many interests on singing but I love to paid for a live house or a concert. I love the circumstances that music bring to people it all.

✓ Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people. Even though I'm not very interested in singing, I love to pay for a live house show or a concert. I love the atmosphere that music brings to people.

Issues: 'seeing' wrong word — should be 'singing'. 'I don't have many interests on singing' is ungrammatical; use 'I'm not very interested in singing'. 'I love to paid for' wrong verb form—use 'I love to pay for' or 'I like to pay to see a live show or concert'. 'Live house' is informal; 'live house show' or 'live performance' preferable. 'The circumstances that music bring to people it all' has verb agreement and redundancy errors: 'music brings' (singular verb), and 'it all' is unnecessary. Suggestion: use correct verb forms, proper prepositions ('interested in'), subject-verb agreement, and clearer nouns like 'atmosphere' or 'mood'.