唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is expressive and personal, but a little repetitive ("brings peace to myself" / "inner self"). Shorten and structure your response: give a clear topic sentence, one or two specific reasons, and a brief example. Vary vocabulary (e.g., "soothes," "relaxes," "uplifts") and avoid repeating the same idea twice.

範例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it relaxes me and helps me express emotions I can't say in words. For example, after a stressful day I sing along to calm, slow songs, which helps me sleep better and feel more positive.

建議: Good clear response with useful detail about learning informally. Make it more concise and use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., "but," "however"). Replace vague phrases like "a lot of bands" with specific examples or types of content, and avoid long clauses that reduce clarity.

範例: No, I’ve never had professional singing lessons, but I learn a lot from online videos and follow a few bands on Instagram. So, I’d say I’m more of a karaoke or bathroom singer who improves by watching tutorials and covers online.

建議: Clear and relevant answer; slightly informal phrasing ("stressbuster," "in shorter words"). Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one linked detail about whom you admire and why. Mentioning specific reasons you’d like to sing for them (e.g., their style or vocal challenge) would improve content and specificity.

範例: I usually sing for myself to relieve stress, so it’s mainly a private hobby. However, if I had the opportunity, I’d love to perform for bands I admire, such as BTS or singers like Ariana Grande, because I admire their vocal technique and energetic performances.

建議: Good direct answer with a meaningful point. Improve coherence by combining short fragments into complete sentences and adding a specific example or result. Use linking words (e.g., "for example," "because") and avoid vague phrases like "people who express themselves using their words."

範例: Yes, I think singing can make people happy because it allows them to express emotions and release stress. For example, community choirs often lift members’ moods and create a strong sense of belonging.

× No, I have never in my life learned how to sing professionally, although I do follow a lot of bands on Instagram and on other social media platforms who I think are very useful for my singing hobby and I feel I could be classified as a bathroom or a karaoke singer.

✓ No, I have never in my life learnt how to sing professionally, although I do follow a lot of bands on Instagram and other social media platforms that I think are very useful for my singing hobby, and I feel I could be classified as a bathroom or karaoke singer.

The main issue is the verb form 'learned' versus 'learnt' (both are past participles; British English prefers 'learnt' but American English uses 'learned'). This sentence also contains relative clause and article issues: use 'that' (or 'which' with a comma) for defining clauses referring to 'platforms' and remove the second 'on' before 'other social media' for concision. Use 'a bathroom or karaoke singer' without the extra 'a' before 'karaoke singer' when listing types.

× I do follow a lot of bands on Instagram and on other social media platforms who I think are very useful for my singing hobby and I feel I could be classified as a bathroom or a karaoke singer.

✓ I do follow a lot of bands on Instagram and other social media platforms that I think are very useful for my singing hobby, and I feel I could be classified as a bathroom or karaoke singer.

The extra preposition 'on' before 'other social media platforms' is unnecessary and makes the sentence wordy. Also, use 'that' for the defining relative clause instead of 'who' because 'platforms' is non-human.

× I do follow a lot of bands on Instagram and on other social media platforms who I think are very useful for my singing hobby and I feel I could be classified as a bathroom or a karaoke singer.

✓ I do follow a lot of bands on Instagram and other social media platforms that I think are very useful for my singing hobby, and I feel I could be classified as a bathroom or karaoke singer.

The relative pronoun 'who' refers to people; 'platforms' are things, so 'that' or 'which' should be used. Using the correct pronoun clarifies the sentence and is grammatically correct.

× It brings peace to myself.

✓ It brings peace to me.

Using 'myself' is incorrect here because 'myself' is a reflexive pronoun used when the subject and object are the same and when emphasis is needed. The simple object pronoun 'me' is correct: 'It brings peace to me.'

× It brings peace to my inner self.

✓ It brings peace to my inner self.

This sentence is acceptable, but if aiming for parallelism with the previous sentence choose one phrasing consistently. No grammatical correction required; kept for clarity.

× I feel like it brings about the emotions which are held within.

✓ I feel it brings out the emotions I hold inside.

'Brings about' is used for causing events; 'brings out' or 'brings forth' is better for revealing emotions. 'Which are held within' is wordy; a concise active structure 'I hold inside' is clearer. This change improves naturalness and clarity.

× I mostly sing for myself to relieve stress, so in shorter words, singing is my stressbuster.

✓ I mostly sing to relieve stress, so in short, singing is my stress buster.

'For myself' is redundant after 'I mostly sing' and can be omitted. 'In shorter words' is unnatural — use 'in short'. 'Stressbuster' is better written as two words or hyphenated ('stress buster' or 'stress-buster'). These changes improve naturalness and correctness.

× Well if given a chance I'd love to sing for my favorite K pop band which is BTS or some other singers I appreciate like Ariana Grande.

✓ Well, if given the chance, I'd love to sing for my favorite K-pop band, BTS, or for other singers I admire, like Ariana Grande.

Add commas for clarity and use 'the chance' (common collocation). 'K pop' should be hyphenated as 'K-pop'. Use 'singers I admire' rather than 'singers I appreciate' for natural collocation. Include 'for' before 'other singers' for parallel structure.

× Specifically for people who express themselves using their words, their voice.

✓ Specifically for people who express themselves through their words and their voice.

Use 'through' instead of 'using' for natural collocation. Combine the phrases with 'and' rather than a comma fragment. The original ended with a sentence fragment; this correction makes it a complete modifier for the next sentence.

× Singing is like therapy to them.

✓ Singing is like therapy for them.

'Therapy to' is less idiomatic than 'therapy for' in this context. 'Therapy for them' is the standard collocation.