唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, state reason, and give a brief specific detail. Avoid grammar mistakes and redundancy (e.g., "any song or vocal", "everyone get irritated"). Use correct verb forms and articles.

範例: No, I don't enjoy singing because I'm not confident in my voice. For example, when I try to sing at family gatherings people often cover their ears, which makes me uncomfortable.

建議: Answer directly, use correct tense and connect ideas clearly. Mention music lessons briefly and explain how learning instruments helped your singing with linking words like "however" or "but".

範例: No, I have never had formal singing lessons. However, I learned to play the guitar and violin, which helped me understand rhythm and pitch and indirectly improved my singing.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence then a specific reason. Fix repetition and grammar ("I I", "make make", "don't demotivated"). Use a linking phrase like "because" then a concise supporting detail.

範例: I'd prefer to sing for my family and close friends because they are supportive and make me feel comfortable, even when my singing isn't perfect.

建議: Be more structured: start with a clear opinion, then explain with a reason and example. Use smoother phrasing like "it depends on the person" and avoid filler words like "uh".

範例: I think it depends on the person. For those who enjoy singing or have it as a hobby, music and singing can definitely bring joy and relieve stress.

建議: Give a direct answer then a specific example. Correct grammar ("one of my friends named Birva", "she is very good"). Avoid repetition like "very very" and use linking words to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I enjoy listening to others sing. For example, my friend Birva sings and plays guitar beautifully, so I often listen to her performances.

建議: Respond clearly and use correct tense and word choice. Explain briefly why you haven't taken classes and give a specific feeling or outcome. Avoid awkward phrases ("between the children", "fills me demotivated").

範例: No, I have never taken singing lessons because I lack confidence. I worry that being in a class with more experienced singers would make me feel discouraged.

× No I don't like singing because I am not good at singing any song or vocal so everyone get irritated of my singing.

✓ No, I don't like singing because I am not good at singing any song or doing vocals, so everyone gets irritated by my singing.

Errors: incorrect verb form 'get' for third-person singular (subject 'everyone' requires 'gets'); awkward noun phrase 'vocal' should be 'doing vocals' or 'vocal performance'; preposition 'of' is incorrect with 'irritated' - use 'irritated by'. Suggestion: use 'gets' for third-person singular, replace 'vocal' with 'doing vocals' or 'vocal performance', and use 'irritated by'.

× No, I don't ever learn how to sing, instead I once I learn how to play guitar and violin, but still it helps me to improve my singing.

✓ No, I have never learned how to sing; instead, I once learned how to play the guitar and the violin, and it still helped me improve my singing.

Errors: incorrect tense 'don't ever learn' should be present perfect 'have never learned' for experience up to now; repeated 'I learn' should be past 'I learned'; missing articles 'the guitar/the violin'; inconsistency 'helps' should be past 'helped' to match 'once learned'. Suggestion: use present perfect for life experience and past simple for specific past events; include articles before instrument names.

× I would like to sing for my family and my close friends because I I am not good at singing but they still make make me feel like I am very well and they don't demotivated me during singing.

✓ I would like to sing for my family and close friends because I am not good at singing, but they still make me feel good and don't discourage me while I sing.

Errors: duplicated 'I' and 'make make'; wrong phrase 'make me feel like I am very well' should be 'make me feel good'; incorrect verb form 'don't demotivated' should be 'don't discourage' (base form after auxiliary); 'during singing' is better as 'while I sing'. Suggestion: remove duplicates, use correct verb forms after auxiliaries, and choose natural phrases ('feel good', 'discourage').

× It depends on person to person if any person has hobby of singing or any person like to sing uh so maybe vocals or music can bring happiness in their life.

✓ It depends on the person: if someone has a hobby of singing or likes to sing, then music or singing can bring happiness to their life.

Errors: awkward structure 'person to person' should be 'on the person' or 'from person to person'; 'any person has hobby' should be 'someone has a hobby' and verb agreement 'like to sing' should be 'likes to sing'; 'vocals' is awkward—use 'singing' or 'music'; preposition 'bring happiness in their life' should be 'bring happiness to their life'. Suggestion: simplify using 'someone' and correct verb agreement and prepositions.

× Yes, I often listen to someone while singing and one of my friend name Birva who is very very well at singing and playing guitar so I like to listen her more.

✓ Yes, I often listen to people singing, and one of my friends, Birva, who is very good at singing and playing the guitar, is someone I like to listen to more.

Errors: 'listen to someone while singing' is awkward—use 'listen to people singing'; 'one of my friend name Birva' needs plural 'friends' and commas for apposition; 'very very well at' should be 'very good at'; 'listen her' needs preposition 'listen to'. Suggestion: use gerund 'singing' to describe the activity, correct noun number, and include 'to' after 'listen'.

× No, I don't ever take any syncing class because I feel that I am not very good at singing and if I take any singing class between the children it fills me demotivated so I don't even any try.

✓ No, I have never taken any singing class because I feel that I am not very good at singing, and if I took a singing class with children I would feel demotivated, so I don't even try.

Errors: 'don't ever take' should be present perfect 'have never taken' for life experience; 'syncing' typo -> 'singing'; 'if I take any singing class between the children' is ungrammatical—use 'with children'; 'it fills me demotivated' is incorrect—use 'I would feel demotivated'; 'I don't even any try' should be 'I don't even try' or 'I don't try at all'. Suggestion: use present perfect for experiences, conditional for hypothetical situations, correct vocabulary and word order.