列表— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答中存在语法错误和重复用词，表达不够自然。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并使用更准确的词汇。

範例: Yes, I always make a shopping list before I go out. For example, when I visit the supermarket, I list items like fish, soy sauce, and salt to make sure I don't forget anything.

建議: 回答不够连贯，表达含糊。建议使用清晰的句子结构，明确表达观点，并使用连接词使内容连贯。

範例: Sometimes I make a list for my work, and it is usually effective. However, in emergencies, we have to act quickly without making a list.

建議: 回答中有许多填充词，表达重复且不够简洁。建议减少口头语，使用简洁明了的句子表达观点。

範例: Some people dislike making lists because it takes time and feels inefficient. They find it troublesome and prefer to work without lists.

建議: 回答表达较为自然，但存在语法和用词不准确的问题。建议简化句子，避免重复，并使用更准确的表达。

範例: I prefer making lists on my phone because it's convenient and I can check it anytime, anywhere. Although paper lists are good, digital ones are more practical for me.

× I always prepare a niche list to buy buy something before I go outside.

✓ I always prepare a niche list to buy something before I go outside.

这里的“buy buy”是重复错误，应删除一个“buy”。

× I will prepare a long list including uh becau, fish, soy sauce and salt.

✓ I will prepare a long list including beef, fish, soy sauce and salt.

原句中“becau”应为“beef”，属于拼写错误，不属于语法问题，但为保证表达正确，做了更正。

× So therefore I always prepare it for umm for prepare myself to enable I can buy in advance.

✓ So therefore I always prepare it to prepare myself so that I can buy in advance.

原句中“for prepare myself to enable I can buy”结构不正确，应使用不定式或从句表达目的。

× Sometimes I will make a list to in my work.

✓ Sometimes I will make a list at my work.

“make a list to in my work”中“to in”用法错误，应使用介词“at”表示地点。

× I have to say it's quite effective sometimes but however it is in vain because when we miss something in emergency so we we need to work it as far as as soon as possible.

✓ I have to say it's quite effective sometimes, but however, it is in vain because when we miss something in an emergency, we need to deal with it as soon as possible.

句子结构混乱，缺少冠词“an”修饰“emergency”，并且“work it”用词不当，应为“deal with it”。

× So we will not make a list have.

✓ So we will not make a list then.

“make a list have”结构错误，可能是口误，应改为“make a list then”或“have a list”。

× As aforementioned, I recall that, uh, working when we make a list, we need to make some time to do it.

✓ As aforementioned, I recall that when we work, making a list requires some time.

原句中“working when we make a list”结构不清晰，应调整语序使句意明确。

× Uh, so therefore, I think some people do not like to make a list because, uh, it's not efficient and it's quite, uh, troublesome.

✓ Therefore, I think some people do not like to make a list because it's not efficient and quite troublesome.

“so therefore”重复使用连接词，建议只用一个连接词。

× So if that's why they don't want to make a list and also, uh, making a list is also cost a lot of time, so they would like to do it.

✓ So that's why they don't want to make a list, and also, making a list also costs a lot of time, so they don't want to do it.

“making a list is also cost”中动词形式错误，应为“costs”，且句意应为“不想做”，故改为“don't want to do it”。

× This is perceived that making a, making it on a paper is quite good, but I like to make it in a phone because, uh, when I just need to watch what see what I need to do next in the next step, so I can take it everywhere.

✓ It is perceived that making a list on paper is quite good, but I like to make it on my phone because when I just need to see what I need to do next, I can take it everywhere.

“making it on a paper”应为“making a list on paper”，“in a phone”应为“on my phone”，且“watch what see”表达不当，应为“see what”。

× So it's quite convenient and it is, uh, good for us to do it.

✓ So it's quite convenient and good for us to do it.

句子中“and it is, uh,”多余，去除后更简洁流畅。