列表— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid unclear words ("photoshopping") and repetition. Also correct article and verb forms ("going shopping," "make a list of what I need").

範例: Yes. When I go shopping, I always make a list of what I need and what I can skip. For example, I separate groceries and household items so I don’t forget essentials and save time in the store.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence, improve grammar and tense consistency, and add one specific example with linking words. Remove filler words and repetitions. Use past tense for completed actions ("I made a list last week") and describe the result briefly.

範例: Yes, I use lists for work and they help me stay organized. For example, last week I made a task list for a project, and because of it I finished the key tasks two days early.

建議: Answer directly, reduce hesitations, and use clearer phrasing and linking words (e.g., "because," "however"). Give one concrete reason and a consequence. Correct grammar ("don't like making lists," "organize things on their own").

範例: Some people don't like making lists because they prefer to rely on their memory. However, this can backfire: for instance, they may miss deadlines or forget tasks when they have many responsibilities.

建議: Give a concise topic sentence, fix word choice and pronouns ("phone is the device" not "home"), and use linking words to explain reasons. Include one specific advantage and a brief example of how it helps you.

範例: I prefer to make lists on my phone because I always carry it with me. For example, when I'm at the store I can quickly check my shopping list and mark items as I buy them, which prevents buying duplicates.

× When I'm going for a shopping, at first I make a list what I need and what I don't need.

✓ When I'm going shopping, I first make a list of what I need and what I don't need.

Use of article 'a' before 'shopping' is incorrect; 'go shopping' is the correct phrase. Also word order: 'I first make a list' is more natural than 'at first I make a list'. 'List of what' requires the preposition 'of'. Suggestions: use set phrases (go shopping), place 'first' before the verb for clarity, and include 'of' after 'list'.

× Actually, after that I I start photoshopping.

✓ Actually, after that I start shopping.

The verb 'photoshopping' is incorrect in this context; likely intended 'shopping'. Also there is a duplicated 'I'. Use the base verb 'shopping' as a gerund in this structure. Suggestion: remove duplicate word and use correct verb 'shopping'.

× Yes, I make a list for more from my work and it really helped me to organize my work and I can also finish my work first as As for uh, as per uh example, last week I make a list of my project and for making the list I can finish.

✓ Yes, I make a list for my work and it really helps me organize my tasks, so I can finish my work earlier. For example, last week I made a list for my project and because of that I was able to finish it.

Many issues: 'more from my work' is incorrect quantifier/phrase; use 'for my work'. Tense inconsistency: 'helped' should match present 'it really helps' or keep past 'it really helped' and adjust rest. Also repetition and awkward phrasing 'finish my work first' should be 'finish earlier' or 'finish it'. 'Last week I make' is wrong tense; use past 'made'. Suggestion: choose consistent tense (present for general habits, past for specific events), use clear quantifiers like 'for my work' and avoid redundant phrases.

× Umm, some people don't like to making lists because they think, uh, they can organize everything by their own and they can remember all of the things.

✓ Umm, some people don't like making lists because they think they can organize everything on their own and remember all the things.

Do not use 'to making' after 'don't like' — use the gerund 'making'. The phrase 'by their own' is incorrect; correct is 'on their own'. 'All of the things' is wordy; 'all the things' or simply 'everything' is better. Suggestion: after 'don't like' use gerund, and use standard prepositional phrase 'on their own'.

× And for that reason, sometimes they have to suffer as like they can't Fe, they can't meet the deadline or, uh, the all the work can't be organized.

✓ For that reason, sometimes they suffer because they can't meet deadlines or organize all the work.

The original has filler words, false starts, and incorrect structure ('have to suffer as like', 'can't Fe'). 'The all the work' is incorrect article usage and word order. Simplify: 'they suffer because they can't meet deadlines or organize all the work.' Suggestion: remove fillers, use concise cause-effect structure, and pluralize 'deadlines' if general.

× Uh, nowadays I prefer to make a list on my phone, uh, because home is the device which I carry every time and everywhere.

✓ Nowadays I prefer to make a list on my phone because it is the device I carry everywhere.

'Home' is incorrect here; should be 'phone' or 'it'. Unnecessary article 'the device which' is wordy; use 'the device I carry everywhere'. Also drop filler words. Suggestion: use pronoun 'it' or 'my phone' and concise relative clause.

× So if I need to see the list or the time table, I can watch it easily and I can follow the instructions.

✓ So if I need to see the list or the timetable, I can view it easily and follow the instructions.

Use 'view' rather than 'watch' for lists or timetables. 'Time table' should be one word 'timetable' or 'schedule'. Also drop redundant 'I can' before the second verb. Suggestion: choose appropriate verbs for inanimate items and streamline sentence.