列表— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise, grammatically correct and organized. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words (umm, uh) and fix grammar (e.g., "I make a list when I go shopping"). Also limit to under five sentences.

範例: Yes, I always make a shopping list when I go out. I usually type it in the Notes app on my phone because I carry my phone everywhere. However, if I forget my phone I quickly write the items in my diary so I don't forget the ingredients I need.

建議: Answer directly with a topic sentence, then give clear reasons with linking words. Correct grammar and avoid fragmented sentences. Be specific about how the list helps (e.g., saves time, prevents overspending). Keep it within five sentences.

範例: Yes, making a list for work is effective for me. By checking the list before buying, I only purchase necessary items and avoid impulse buys. As a result, I save money and time during shopping.

建議: Provide a complete and specific explanation. Start with a clear topic sentence and expand with reasons or examples using linking words. Correct grammar ("because of their memory" or better: "because they rely on their memory"). Avoid one-word answers.

範例: Some people dislike making lists because they prefer to rely on their memory. For example, they may feel making a list is unnecessary or time-consuming, especially if they rarely forget tasks.

建議: Give a clear preference in one sentence, then one specific reason using linking words. Remove repetition and correct grammar (e.g., "I prefer using my phone because..."). Keep answer natural and concise.

範例: I prefer making lists on my phone because I always carry it and can access the Notes app easily. This way I can quickly add or tick off items and avoid losing a paper list.

× I always make list while going to shopping.

✓ I always make a list when I go shopping.

Missing article 'a' before 'list' (article error) and incorrect verb phrase 'going to shopping'. Use 'when I go shopping' for natural present habit. Suggestion: add 'a' and use 'go shopping' for correct collocation.

× Umm, I always make a list, uh, where in the app called notes.

✓ Umm, I always make a list in an app called Notes.

Incorrect preposition and article: 'where in' is redundant and 'the app called notes' should be 'an app called Notes' (proper noun capitalization). Use preposition 'in' with 'app' and the indefinite article 'an' for one of many apps.

× Umm, while I don't have my phone, I just go to diary and, uh, write something, some ingredients in that paper, uh, so that I'll continue to do without.

✓ If I don't have my phone, I just use a diary and write some ingredients on a piece of paper so I can still do it without my phone.

Multiple article errors: 'go to diary' should be 'use a diary'; 'that paper' unclear—use 'a piece of paper'; 'I'll continue to do without' is awkward. Also preposition 'on' required for writing 'on a piece of paper'. Suggestions: include appropriate articles ('a diary', 'a piece of paper') and use clear phrasing 'so I can still do it without my phone'.

× Yes it does. When I always make list, I just go through that list and only purchase that thing which is needed and not waste my money in other things.

✓ Yes, it does. When I make a list, I just go through it and only purchase the things that are needed, so I don't waste my money on other items.

Article and plural errors: 'make list' needs 'a list'; 'that thing which is needed' should be plural 'the things that are needed'; preposition 'waste money on' is correct. Also remove redundant 'always' and improve sentence flow.

× Which uh, you keep buying unnecessary things.

✓ Otherwise, you might keep buying unnecessary things.

Fragment: 'Which you keep buying...' is a subordinate clause without a main clause. Rephrase to a complete conditional idea: 'Otherwise, you might keep buying unnecessary things.' Use modal 'might' to express possibility.

× Some people don't like to make list because their memory.

✓ Some people don't like to make lists because of their memory.

Pronoun/phrase and article errors: 'make list' needs plural 'lists' or 'a list'; 'because their memory' is incomplete—use 'because of their memory' or better 'because they have a bad memory'. Suggestion: 'because of their memory' or 'because they have poor memory'.

× I usually take my phone everywhere I go so I would like to do in my phone and the app called add notes.

✓ I usually take my phone everywhere I go, so I like to use my phone and an app called Notes.

Article and verb choice issues: 'do in my phone' is incorrect—use 'use my phone'; 'the app called add notes' should be 'an app called Notes' (article and proper name). Also use comma before 'so' for clarity.

× So just easy for me to carry my phone and just go through the phone in the app called notes so it will be easy for me to say the list.

✓ It's just easier for me to carry my phone and check the Notes app, so it's easy for me to see the list.

Preposition and word choice errors: 'go through the phone in the app' is awkward—use 'check the Notes app'. 'Say the list' is incorrect; likely intended 'see the list'. Also comparative form 'easier' needed. Suggestion: use 'easier' and correct verbs 'check' and 'see'.