图书馆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and contains some grammatical errors. Try to make your response more concise and clear by avoiding redundancy and improving sentence structure. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

範例: No, I don't often go to the library because my busy work schedule at the pharmacy leaves me little free time. Instead, I usually rely on my mobile phone to find the information I need quickly.

建議: Your answer addresses the question but could be more structured and fluent. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid awkward phrasing. Also, be more specific about the types of books or projects to enrich your answer.

範例: Although I don't visit the library now, when I was in school and college, I enjoyed reading my favourite books there. Additionally, I gathered important information for my projects, which helped me study effectively. I liked the calm atmosphere that allowed me to focus.

建議: Your answer is relevant but contains grammatical mistakes and some unclear phrases. Try to use correct verb tenses and clearer sentence structures. Also, organize your ideas logically with linking words.

範例: Yes, when I was a kid, my favourite part of school was the library because our teacher often took us there. We enjoyed reading princess stories and cartoon books, and we also did colouring activities, which I really liked.

建議: Your answer is somewhat vague and contains hesitations. Try to be more confident and specific in your response. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and use linking words to make your answer coherent.

範例: I believe many children, including Chinese kids, enjoy going to the library because they can read princess stories, cartoons, and do colouring activities. These simple pleasures make childhood enjoyable for many kids.

× No, actually I don't go off into the library as because of my busy schedule about working and my pharmacy.

✓ No, actually I don't go to the library because of my busy schedule with work and my pharmacy.

The phrase 'go off into the library' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'go to the library'. Also, 'as because of' is redundant; use 'because of' alone. 'Schedule about working' is incorrect; 'schedule with work' is appropriate.

× I just very I just really rely on my mobile phone to get whatever information I need to.

✓ I just really rely on my mobile phone to get whatever information I need.

The phrase 'I just very I just really' is redundant and awkward. Removing 'very' and the repeated 'I just' improves clarity and correctness.

× So the mostly the thing I really enjoy in the library was reading my favorite books, gathering all the information which is necessary in the life for my project works.

✓ So mostly, the thing I really enjoyed in the library was reading my favorite books and gathering all the information necessary for my project work in life.

'Mostly the thing' should be 'mostly, the thing'. 'Which is necessary in the life' is incorrect; 'necessary for my project work in life' is better. 'Project works' should be singular 'project work'.

× As I told you, I don't go to the library now, but when I used to go to the library when I was in college and schools.

✓ As I told you, I don't go to the library now, but I used to go to the library when I was in college and school.

The phrase 'when I used to go to the library when I was' is redundant; 'I used to go to the library when I was' is correct. 'Schools' should be singular 'school' when referring generally.

× Yes, when I was a kid the most favorite part in my school was library because our teacher gather us to go to the library.

✓ Yes, when I was a kid, the most favorite part of my school was the library because our teacher gathered us to go to the library.

'Part in my school' should be 'part of my school'. 'Library' needs the definite article 'the'. 'Gather' should be past tense 'gathered'.

× There were Princess stories and the cartoon books which we really liked.

✓ There were princess stories and cartoon books which we really liked.

'Princess' and 'cartoon' should not be capitalized unless they are proper nouns. The sentence is otherwise correct.

× So I usually love to go to the library and we just do over there and we also we do also the coloring over there and I really like that part.

✓ So I usually loved to go to the library and we just did activities there, and we also did coloring there, which I really liked.

'Do over there' is vague and incorrect; 'did activities there' is clearer. 'We do also the coloring over there' is awkward; 'we also did coloring there' is correct. Past tense 'loved' and 'did' match the time frame.

× I think all the kids like to go to the library. Uh, not, I will not say specifically about the Chinese kid, but I think the kids like to go to the library for, uh, for the Princess stories, cartoons, coloring and all the stuff like that.

✓ I think all kids like to go to the library. Uh, I will not say specifically about Chinese kids, but I think kids like to go to the library for princess stories, cartoons, coloring, and all that stuff.

'The kids' is better as 'kids' for generalization. 'Chinese kid' should be plural 'Chinese kids'. 'Princess' should not be capitalized unless a proper noun.

× Because like we're even kid when we are kids, we like to enjoy those stuff.

✓ Because even when we were kids, we liked to enjoy those things.

'We're even kid when we are kids' is incorrect; 'even when we were kids' is correct. 'Those stuff' should be 'those things' as 'stuff' is uncountable and does not take 'those'.