图书馆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문법적 오류가 많으며, 중복된 표현이 있습니다. 문장을 명확하고 간결하게 구성하고, 주제 문장과 추가 설명을 논리적으로 연결하는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: Yes, I often go to the library because I enjoy reading books about science and technology. Since my major is civil engineering, I find these topics very helpful for my studies.

建議: 답변이 명확하지 않고 중복된 표현이 많으며, 문장이 논리적으로 연결되지 않습니다. 질문에 직접 답하고, 구체적인 활동을 명확하게 설명하는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: Usually, I spend my time in the library reading books related to my studies. Sometimes, I also plan my day or imagine new ideas while relaxing there.

建議: 문법 오류와 어색한 표현이 많아 의미 전달이 어렵습니다. 과거 시제를 정확히 사용하고, 이유를 명확하게 설명하는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: When I was a child, I did not like going to the library because my mother always told me to read books, but I preferred playing outside.

建議: 답변이 다소 모호하고 문법적 오류가 있습니다. 자신의 의견을 명확하게 표현하고, 문장을 간결하게 만드는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: I am not Chinese, so I am not sure, but since China is a large country with many people, I believe that many Chinese children often visit libraries.

× In library, Oh yes, I usually go to the library.

✓ In the library, oh yes, I usually go to the library.

The phrase 'In library' is missing the definite article 'the' before 'library'. In English, when referring to a specific place like 'library', the definite article 'the' is required. 따라서 'In library'는 'In the library'로 수정해야 합니다.

× I'm very like reading a book about the science or the mobile.

✓ I really like reading books about science or mobile technology.

The phrase 'I'm very like' is incorrect; 'like' is a verb and should not be preceded by 'very'. Instead, use 'really like' to express strong liking. Also, 'a book about the science or the mobile' is awkward; 'books about science or mobile technology' is more natural. 따라서 'I'm very like'는 'I really like'로, 'a book about the science or the mobile'는 'books about science or mobile technology'로 수정해야 합니다.

× My major, the my major is civil engineering, so I will.

✓ My major, my major is civil engineering, so I will.

The phrase 'the my major' is incorrect because 'my' is a possessive pronoun and does not need the definite article 'the'. Therefore, 'the my major' should be corrected to 'my major'. 또한 문장이 완성되지 않아 의미 전달이 불명확합니다.

× Oh, like, in fact, I like I like books mere so just I'm imagination in the library and what I what I'm going to do in what I going to do today.

✓ Oh, like, in fact, I like books, so I just imagine in the library what I am going to do today.

The original sentence is fragmented and repetitive ('I like I like books mere so just'). It lacks proper conjunctions and verb forms. Correcting the sentence structure improves clarity and flow. 따라서 문장 구조를 재배열하고 중복을 제거해야 합니다.

× Finally, I'm reading a book, a book only one, only one book.

✓ Finally, I'm reading only one book.

The phrase 'a book only one, only one book' is redundant and awkward. Simplifying to 'only one book' is clearer. 또한 현재 진행형 'I'm reading'은 적절하게 사용되었습니다.

× Actually, I'm in my childhood.

✓ Actually, when I was a child.

'I'm in my childhood' is incorrect because 'childhood' is a period in the past. The correct expression is 'when I was a child' to indicate past time. 따라서 현재 시제 대신 과거 시제를 사용해야 합니다.

× I hate the book because my mom told me reading a book always, but I did.

✓ I hated books because my mom always told me to read books, but I didn't.

'I hate the book' should be past tense 'I hated books' to match past context. 'My mom told me reading a book always' is incorrect; it should be 'my mom always told me to read books'. 'But I did' is incomplete; 'but I didn't' (do it) is correct. 따라서 대명사와 동사 형태를 수정해야 합니다.

× I want to play outside, so when I was a kid, I'm not going to the library.

✓ I wanted to play outside, so when I was a kid, I didn't go to the library.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. 'I want' should be past tense 'I wanted' to match 'when I was a kid'. 'I'm not going' should be past tense 'I didn't go'. 따라서 시제 일치를 위해 동사 형태를 수정해야 합니다.

× I'm not Chinese so I don't know if the Chinese kids often go to the library, but I think Chinese is very big and many many people in is living there so I think they often go to the library.

✓ I'm not Chinese, so I don't know if Chinese kids often go to the library, but I think China is very big and many people live there, so I think they often go to the library.

'Chinese is very big' is incorrect; the country 'China' is big, not 'Chinese'. 'Many many people in is living there' is ungrammatical; correct form is 'many people live there'. Also, commas are needed for clarity. 따라서 명사와 동사 형태, 문장 부호를 수정해야 합니다.