图书馆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Jawaban Anda kurang natural dan ada pengulangan kata yang tidak perlu. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih singkat dan jelas, serta perbaiki tata bahasa, terutama tense. Misalnya, gunakan past tense yang konsisten saat berbicara tentang masa lalu dan hindari pengulangan kata 'go to the library'.

範例: I rarely go to the library nowadays because I'm very busy. However, when I was in junior high school, I visited the library almost every day because I enjoyed reading there.

建議: Jawaban Anda kurang terstruktur dan ada beberapa kesalahan tata bahasa serta penggunaan kata yang kurang tepat. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih jelas dan gunakan kata penghubung untuk membuat jawaban lebih koheren. Jelaskan aktivitas Anda dengan spesifik dan gunakan kosakata yang sesuai.

範例: In the library, I usually read books, but sometimes I also do illustrating and coloring. I enjoy spending quiet time there because it helps me relax. That's why I like going to the library.

建議: Jawaban Anda kurang jelas dan ada kesalahan tata bahasa serta pengulangan kata. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih sederhana dan langsung menjawab pertanyaan. Jelaskan alasan dengan kalimat yang terstruktur dan gunakan tense yang tepat.

範例: I couldn't go to the library when I was a kid because there was no local library in my neighborhood. The nearest library was an hour away, so it was difficult to visit.

建議: Jawaban Anda mengandung kesalahan tata bahasa dan kalimat yang kurang jelas. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih sederhana dan langsung, serta perbaiki penggunaan kata kerja dan struktur kalimat. Jelaskan pendapat Anda dengan alasan yang jelas dan gunakan kosakata yang tepat.

範例: I don't think Chinese kids in my neighborhood often go to the library because, like me, there is no local library nearby. I believe both Chinese and local children need access to libraries, and the government should provide better facilities.

× When I was in junior high school, I go to the library almost every day.

✓ When I was in junior high school, I went to the library almost every day.

The sentence refers to a past time ('When I was in junior high school'), so the verb should be in the past tense. 'Go' is present tense; it should be changed to 'went' to match the past context.

× Almost every day because I like in.

✓ Almost every day because I liked it.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. 'I like in' is incorrect; it should be 'I liked it' to express the reason clearly and grammatically.

× There are many things that I do in the library, not only reading, sometimes I do illustrating, coloring and just morning because library is quiet place to me for making me time.

✓ There are many things that I do in the library, not only reading; sometimes I do illustrating, coloring, and just relaxing because the library is a quiet place for me to have my time.

The original sentence has incorrect conjunction use and missing articles. 'Just morning' is unclear and likely a mistake for 'just relaxing'. Also, 'library is quiet place' needs 'the' and 'a' for correct article usage.

× because library is quiet place to me for making me time.

✓ because the library is a quiet place for me to have my time.

The noun 'library' requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific place, and 'quiet place' needs the indefinite article 'a'. Also, 'for making me time' is incorrect; it should be 'for me to have my time'.

× I hope I can go to the library when when I was a kid, but I can't because in my neighborhood there are no local library that help us to increase our knowledge.

✓ I hoped I could go to the library when I was a kid, but I couldn't because in my neighborhood there was no local library that helped us to increase our knowledge.

The sentence refers to past time, so modal verbs should be in past form: 'hope' to 'hoped', 'can' to 'could', 'can't' to 'couldn't'. Also, 'help' should be 'helped' to match past tense.

× there are no local library that help us to increase our knowledge.

✓ there is no local library that helps us to increase our knowledge.

'Library' is singular, so the verb should be singular 'is' instead of 'are', and 'help' should be 'helps' to agree with singular subject.

× But we need to go to local library for an hour to go there, so no.

✓ But we need to go to the local library, which is an hour away, so no.

The phrase 'for an hour to go there' is awkward. It should be rephrased to 'which is an hour away' to indicate distance/time. Also, 'local library' needs 'the'.

× I don't think the Chinese kids in my neighborhood is often go to the library because Sam's condition with me.

✓ I don't think the Chinese kids in my neighborhood often go to the library because it's the same condition as mine.

'Kids' is plural, so 'is' should be 'are' or omitted. 'Is often go' is incorrect; it should be 'often go'. Also, 'Sam's condition with me' is unclear and corrected to 'it's the same condition as mine'.

× There are no local library in my neighborhood so they are rarely go to the library.

✓ There is no local library in my neighborhood, so they rarely go to the library.

'Library' is singular, so 'are' should be 'is'. Also, 'are rarely go' is incorrect; it should be 'rarely go'.

× I think both Chinese or local person need go to the library and facilitate by the government.

✓ I think both Chinese and local people need to go to the library and be facilitated by the government.

'Person' should be plural 'people' to match 'both'. 'Need go' is incorrect; it should be 'need to go'. 'Facilitate' should be passive 'be facilitated'.