图书馆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more natural and grammatically correct by using proper verb forms and sentence structures. Avoid redundancy by combining similar ideas and use linking words to connect your points logically. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific reasons with linking words like 'because' or 'and'.

範例: I often go to the library depending on my mood because I need information for my science and physics projects. Also, when I feel bored, I enjoy reading interesting novels like 'Peer-e-Kamil' there.

建議: Improve your answer by avoiding repetition and using correct prepositions and verb forms. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Be specific about what you do and why you like it. Keep your answer concise and clear.

範例: In the library, I usually read novels such as 'Peer-e-Kamil' and 'Amar Bail' by Umera Ahmed because it is a peaceful and calming place. I also use the library to find information for my studies.

建議: Focus on using the correct past tense and avoid repetition. Provide a clear topic sentence and support it with specific details. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and natural.

範例: Yes, I often went to the library with my father when I was a kid. We used to read short stories and essays, including books like 'Peer-e-Kamil' and 'Amar Bail' by Umera Ahmed, which I really enjoyed.

建議: Avoid unclear or incomplete sentences. If you don't know the answer, say so clearly and briefly. Avoid unnecessary personal information and focus on giving a natural and direct response. Use linking words to clarify your point.

範例: I'm not sure if Chinese kids often go to the library because I don't have much information about that. However, I think it's good for all children to read interesting books when they visit the library.

× Well, it's totally depend on my mood.

✓ Well, it totally depends on my mood.

The modal verb 'it's' (it is) should be followed by a verb in the base form or third person singular present tense. 'Depend' should be 'depends' to agree with the singular subject 'it'.

× I usually go to library for getting such information of my projects.

✓ I usually go to the library to get information for my projects.

The noun 'library' requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific place. Also, 'for getting' is better expressed as 'to get' for purpose.

× Like science and physics projects.

✓ For example, science and physics projects.

The sentence fragment 'Like science and physics projects.' is incomplete. It should be connected properly to the previous sentence or rephrased as a complete sentence.

× And when I feel bored I also go to library for reading interesting novels such as period Kamil and I also prefer to going library.

✓ And when I feel bored, I also go to the library to read interesting novels such as Pire Kamil, and I also prefer going to the library.

Again, 'library' needs the definite article 'the'. 'For reading' should be 'to read' to express purpose. 'Prefer to going' is incorrect; it should be 'prefer going'. Also, 'period Kamil' seems to be a misspelling of 'Pire Kamil'.

× Well, I usually read interesting novels like Pire Kamil and Amar Bail by Umara Ahmed because the library is very peaceful and calming place and I really enjoy to read these novels and I also prefer to go to library for getting information or reading books.

✓ Well, I usually read interesting novels like Pire Kamil and Amar Bail by Umera Ahmed because the library is a very peaceful and calming place, and I really enjoy reading these novels. I also prefer to go to the library to get information or read books.

'The library is very peaceful and calming place' needs an article before 'very peaceful' ('a very peaceful'). 'Enjoy to read' is incorrect; it should be 'enjoy reading'. 'Go to library' needs 'the'. 'For getting' should be 'to get'.

× When I was a kid I often go to library with my father to read short stories or interesting essays like Pirekamil and Amarbil by Umara Amaz and I really enjoy to read these.

✓ When I was a kid, I often went to the library with my father to read short stories or interesting essays like Pire Kamil and Amar Bail by Umera Ahmed, and I really enjoyed reading these.

Since the time frame is past ('when I was a kid'), verbs should be in past tense: 'go' to 'went', 'enjoy' to 'enjoyed'. 'Go to library' needs 'the'. 'Enjoy to read' should be 'enjoyed reading'. Also corrected names for consistency.

× Well, I don't know about the kids of Chinese.

✓ Well, I don't know about Chinese kids.

The phrase 'kids of Chinese' is incorrect; the correct form is 'Chinese kids'.

× The reason is that because I am a Pakistani and.

✓ The reason is that I am Pakistani.

The sentence is incomplete and redundant. 'That because' is incorrect; use either 'that' or 'because'. The sentence should be complete and concise.

× And I also prefer to Chinese kids to read interesting books when they go to library.

✓ And I also prefer Chinese kids to read interesting books when they go to the library.

'Prefer to Chinese kids' is incorrect; it should be 'prefer Chinese kids to read'. Also, 'go to library' needs 'the'.