图书馆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is a bit long and slightly off-topic with the question "How about when I started college?" which is confusing. Try to keep your answer focused and concise, directly answering the question with clear supporting details. Avoid redundancy and maintain natural English flow.

範例: Yes, I often went to the library in high school because it was quiet and had many interesting books. However, when I started college, I had less time to visit because of my busy schedule, so I studied mostly at home.

建議: Your answer is unclear and incomplete, with some repetition and grammatical errors. Try to give a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific details using linking words. Avoid hesitation and finish your sentences properly.

範例: Usually, I read books about science, human health, and law in the library. I especially enjoy exploring science books because they help me understand the world better.

建議: Your answer has grammatical mistakes and unclear expressions. Try to answer directly with a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details. Avoid filler words and repetition to make your answer more natural and effective.

範例: No, I did not often go to the library when I was a kid because it was not required. Instead, I enjoyed buying storybooks and horror stories from the bookstore to read at home.

建議: Your answer is too short and lacks content. Even if you don't know, try to give a general opinion or guess to show your ability to speak. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent and natural.

範例: I am not sure about Chinese kids, but I think many children in China visit libraries because schools encourage reading. Libraries usually have activities like reading sessions and study groups for students.

× How about when I started college? I didn't have much time to visit the library because I was under a lot of pressure to prepare my for my exam and complete assignments, so I mostly studied at my home instead.

✓ How about when I started college? I didn't have much time to visit the library because I was under a lot of pressure to prepare for my exam and complete assignments, so I mostly studied at home instead.

The phrase 'prepare my for my exam' contains an unnecessary possessive pronoun 'my' before 'for'. The correct phrase is 'prepare for my exam'. Also, 'at my home' is better expressed as 'at home' in English. This correction improves clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× And when I was in high school, I used to love reading books about science, about human health and about laws. So I love exploring books that is about science over human health and I read them in.

✓ And when I was in high school, I used to love reading books about science, human health, and law. So I loved exploring books that are about science and human health, and I read them there.

The phrase 'books that is about' is incorrect because 'books' is plural and requires the plural verb 'are'. Also, 'about laws' is better as 'about law' for general topics. The phrase 'over human health' is unclear and replaced with 'and human health' for clarity. The sentence ending 'I read them in' is incomplete and corrected to 'I read them there' to complete the thought.

× I was focusing more in my study.

✓ I was focusing more on my studies.

The verb 'focus' is followed by the preposition 'on', not 'in'. Also, 'study' should be plural 'studies' when referring to academic work in general. This correction aligns with standard English usage.

× Why didn't when I was in kindergarten school, it wasn't that mandatory to go to a library.

✓ When I was in kindergarten, it wasn't mandatory to go to a library.

The phrase 'Why didn't when I was in kindergarten school' is ungrammatical and confusing. Removing 'Why didn't' and 'school' after 'kindergarten' clarifies the sentence. Also, 'mandatory to go to a library' is correct but 'that' is unnecessary here.

× I was focusing more playing and doing my regular studies.

✓ I was focusing more on playing and doing my regular studies.

The verb 'focus' requires the preposition 'on' before the activities it relates to. Adding 'on' before 'playing' corrects the sentence.

× I used to do like I used to buy, uh, story books and horror, horror, uh, horror stories from the bookstore.

✓ I used to buy story books and horror stories from the bookstore.

The phrase 'I used to do like I used to buy' is redundant and incorrect. Simplifying to 'I used to buy' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× Sorry, I don't have the experience about Chinese people if they go to the library and I don't know what the what kind of activities they do in their school or libraries.

✓ Sorry, I don't have experience about whether Chinese people go to the library, and I don't know what kind of activities they do in their schools or libraries.

The phrase 'the experience about Chinese people if they go' is awkward. Changing to 'experience about whether Chinese people go' improves clarity. Also, 'their school or libraries' should be pluralized consistently as 'their schools or libraries'.