图书馆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 文法の誤りや不自然な表現が多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。例えば、「to study for exam」は「to study for exams」や「to prepare for exams」とするべきです。また、「It also going to rivalry can get many kinds of knowledges」は意味が不明瞭で、正しい英語表現に直す必要があります。より自然で効果的な回答にするために、文法を正し、具体的な理由や効果を明確に述べることを意識しましょう。

範例: Yes, I often go to the library to study for my exams because it helps me concentrate better. Also, by reading various books there, I can gain a lot of knowledge on different subjects.

建議: 回答は質問に直接答えていますが、文が繰り返しや不自然な表現を含んでいます。例えば、「makes me feel relaxed to study」は「makes me feel relaxed and focused」などにすると自然です。また、「For example. It's so it it is so quiet.」は文法的に誤りで、繋がりも不明瞭です。接続詞を使い、具体的な理由を明確に述べることで、より効果的な回答になります。

範例: I usually study in the library because it is very quiet, which helps me concentrate. Moreover, the calm atmosphere makes me feel relaxed and focused on my work.

建議: 文法の誤りが多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。例えば、「didn't used to」は「didn't use to」が正しいですし、「calm place because it feels so stress stressful」は不自然です。より自然な表現に直し、理由を明確に述べることが必要です。

範例: To be honest, I didn't use to go to the library when I was a kid because I didn't like quiet places; they made me feel stressed.

建議: 回答は内容的に適切ですが、繰り返しや冗長な表現があります。例えば、「I find it that the Chinese kids often go to library」は「I think Chinese kids often go to the library」と簡潔にできます。また、接続詞の使い方を工夫し、文をスムーズにつなげると良いでしょう。

範例: Actually, I don't know much about Chinese kids, but I think they often go to the library because they have many exams ahead and need to study hard.

× Yes, I often go to the library to study for exam which is really beneficial for me to obtain high score in my exam.

✓ Yes, I often go to the library to study for exams which are really beneficial for me to obtain high scores in my exams.

The word 'exam' should be plural 'exams' because it refers to multiple instances. Also, 'high score' should be plural 'high scores' to match the plural 'exams'. This is a singular and plural agreement issue.

× It also going to rivalry can get many kinds of knowledges by reading the books.

✓ Also, by going to the library, I can gain many kinds of knowledge by reading books.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and confusing. 'It also going to rivalry' is incorrect; 'rivalry' is not appropriate here. The sentence structure is incorrect and needs rephrasing for clarity. 'Knowledges' is incorrect; 'knowledge' is uncountable.

× I usually study in the library because the place itself makes me feel relaxed to study and I just really like going to library.

✓ I usually study in the library because the place itself makes me feel relaxed to study and I just really like going to the library.

The phrase 'going to library' is missing the definite article 'the'. When referring to a specific place like 'library', 'the' is required.

× For example. It's so it it is so quiet.

✓ For example, it is so quiet.

The original sentence has repeated words and incorrect punctuation. It should be a single sentence with a comma after 'For example' and no repetition.

× I'm to be honest, I didn't used to go to library when I was kid because I don't really like to be in calm place because it feels so stress stressful.

✓ To be honest, I didn't use to go to the library when I was a kid because I didn't really like to be in a calm place as it felt so stressful.

'I'm to be honest' is incorrect; it should be 'To be honest'. 'Didn't used to' should be 'didn't use to' because 'use' is the base form after 'did'. 'Library' needs 'the'. 'When I was kid' needs 'a kid'. 'Stress stressful' is incorrect; 'stressful' alone is correct. Also, tense consistency is needed.

× Actually, I don't really know about Chinese kids, but I find it that the Chinese kids often go to library because they have a lot of exams for their future, so they need to study hard, therefore they go to library.

✓ Actually, I don't really know about Chinese kids, but I find that Chinese kids often go to the library because they have a lot of exams for their future, so they need to study hard; therefore, they go to the library.

'Go to library' should be 'go to the library' because 'library' is a specific place. Also, 'I find it that' is better as 'I find that'. Punctuation is improved for clarity.