图书馆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Perbaiki penggunaan tata bahasa dan pilih kata yang lebih tepat seperti 'peaceful' bukan 'peace'. Hindari pengulangan dan kata-kata tidak formal seperti 'uh' dan 'chill'. Buat kalimat lebih singkat dan jelas agar lebih natural dan efektif.

範例: Yes, I have developed the habit of going to the library since high school because it is a peaceful and quiet place where I can focus on my homework or relax without being disturbed.

建議: Hindari penggunaan kata tidak formal seperti 'chill' dan pengulangan kata seperti 'some some'. Gunakan kata penghubung yang tepat untuk membuat jawaban lebih koheren dan gunakan kosakata yang lebih sesuai seperti 'peaceful' bukan 'peace'.

範例: Usually, I do my homework or work on group projects in the library because it has many books that provide useful resources and inspiration. Additionally, I sometimes read quietly there since it is a peaceful environment without disturbances.

建議: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan struktur kalimat, serta hindari kalimat yang tidak lengkap atau membingungkan seperti 'I usually when they're one of my parents'. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih jelas dan terstruktur dengan baik.

範例: Yes, as a child, I often visited Gramedia, which is a bookstore rather than a library. I enjoyed reading fictional comics there because the pictures made the stories more exciting. I usually went there when one of my parents was shopping nearby.

建議: Hindari kalimat yang terlalu umum dan stereotip seperti 'Chinese people are smart'. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih objektif dan hindari pengulangan kata 'really'. Buat jawaban lebih formal dan terstruktur.

範例: In my opinion, many Chinese children enjoy reading and visiting libraries. This habit helps them gain knowledge and develop their skills, which is very beneficial for their education.

× I really love to go into library because it is very peace and calm, which is a great place for me to focus and to do my homework or task.

✓ I really love going to the library because it is very peaceful and calm, which is a great place for me to focus and do my homework or tasks.

The modal verb 'love to go' is better expressed as 'love going' to indicate a habitual action. Also, 'peace' should be the adjective 'peaceful' to describe the library, and 'task' should be plural 'tasks' to match the context of multiple assignments.

× I really love to go into library because it is very peace and calm, which is a great place for me to focus and to do my homework or task.

✓ I really love going to the library because it is very peaceful and calm, which is a great place for me to focus and do my homework or tasks.

The noun 'library' requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific place known to both speaker and listener.

× I usually just do my homework or maybe do a group project in there because there's a lot of books, right?

✓ I usually just do my homework or maybe do a group project there because there are a lot of books, right?

The phrase 'in there' is better replaced with 'there' for naturalness. Also, 'there's' should be 'there are' to agree with the plural noun 'books'.

× I usually just do my homework or maybe do a group project in there because there's a lot of books, right?

✓ I usually just do my homework or maybe do a group project there because there are a lot of books, right?

'There is' (there's) is singular and should be used with singular nouns. Since 'books' is plural, 'there are' is the correct form.

× Or I can just chill there and just sit and read some some books for me without everybody going to disturb me because it's peace and calm.

✓ Or I can just chill there and sit and read some books by myself without everybody disturbing me because it's peaceful and calm.

The phrase 'some some' is a repetition error and should be 'some'. 'For me' is unnatural here; 'by myself' is better. 'Going to disturb me' should be 'disturbing me' for correct verb form. 'Peace' should be 'peaceful' as an adjective.

× Although it was not exactly a library, it is a bookstore.

✓ Although it was not exactly a library, it was a bookstore.

The sentence refers to a past time, so 'is' should be changed to 'was' to maintain past tense consistency.

× I enjoy reading many books there, especially fictional comics.

✓ I enjoyed reading many books there, especially fictional comics.

Since the context is past ('when I was a kid'), the verb should be in past tense 'enjoyed'.

× And I really love comics because the picture made the story much more excite, exciting and I usually when they're one of my parents, were shopping nearby.

✓ And I really loved comics because the pictures made the story much more exciting, and I usually went there when one of my parents was shopping nearby.

The verb 'love' should be past tense 'loved' to match past context. 'Picture' should be plural 'pictures' to agree with 'made'. 'Excite' is incorrect; 'exciting' is the correct adjective. The sentence structure is awkward; 'I usually went there when one of my parents was shopping nearby' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× In my opinion, yes, I've seen a lot of Chinese people, even my friends who is Chinese really love to read and go to the library.

✓ In my opinion, yes, I've seen a lot of Chinese people, even my friends who are Chinese really love to read and go to the library.

The relative pronoun 'who' refers to 'friends' which is plural, so the verb should be 'are' not 'is'.

× That is a really good habit that makes them smart.

✓ That is a really good habit that makes them smart.

This sentence is correct; no change needed.

× We always see a lot of Chinese people are smart, right?

✓ We always see that a lot of Chinese people are smart, right?

The sentence needs the conjunction 'that' to connect the clauses properly.