图书馆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to reduce filler words like 'uh' and 'um' to make your speech more fluent and natural. Also, clarify your points with more precise vocabulary and correct grammar, for example, say 'it has a quiet atmosphere' instead of 'cold atmosphere'. Keep your answer concise and avoid redundancy.

範例: Yes, I go to the library almost every day because it has a quiet atmosphere that helps me stay focused. Additionally, our library is beautifully designed, almost like a piece of art, which makes studying there enjoyable.

建議: Avoid filler words and incomplete sentences. Structure your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details using linking words. For example, use 'I usually go there to complete projects and read publications. Also, sometimes I write grant proposals because the library helps me concentrate.'

範例: I usually go to the library to complete my projects and read academic publications. Also, sometimes I write grant proposals there because the quiet environment helps me concentrate better.

建議: Your answer is incomplete and contains many filler words. Try to complete your thoughts clearly and avoid redundancy. For example, say 'Yes, I used to go to the library as a child. It was different then because an instructor helped us summarize books, which made learning easier.'

範例: Yes, I used to go to the library when I was a kid. It was different back then because an instructor helped us summarize books, which made learning more effective.

建議: Avoid filler words and complete your sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. For example, say 'Yes, Chinese kids often go to the library because it is a positive value in our culture. Parents and teachers encourage children to participate in group study and other activities there from a young age.'

範例: Yes, Chinese kids often go to the library because it is highly valued in our culture. Parents and teachers encourage children to join group studies and other activities at the library from an early age.

× I go to the library every day because it is really, uh, it has cold atmosphere to study and, uh, stay focused and actually, uh, our library is a piece of art because, uh, it designed with nice decoration.

✓ I go to the library every day because it has a really cold atmosphere to study and stay focused, and actually, our library is a piece of art because it is designed with nice decoration.

The phrase 'it is really, uh, it has cold atmosphere' is incorrect because 'cold' is an adjective that needs an article before 'atmosphere' and 'really' should modify 'cold' directly. Also, 'it designed' is missing the auxiliary verb 'is' to form the passive voice. The corrected sentence uses 'has a really cold atmosphere' and 'it is designed' to fix these errors.

× I usually go there to complete my project, reading, umm, publications and sometimes, uh, writing a grant because I really need to stay focused and I don't know what is it about library that, uh, as soon as I sit.

✓ I usually go there to complete my project, read publications, and sometimes write a grant because I really need to stay focused, and I don't know what it is about the library that, as soon as I sit down,

The verbs 'reading' and 'writing' are incorrectly used as gerunds here; they should be in the base form 'read' and 'write' to match the infinitive 'to complete'. Also, 'what is it about library' should be 'what it is about the library' for correct word order and article usage. The phrase 'as soon as I sit' is incomplete and should be 'as soon as I sit down' for clarity.

× Yes, I used to, uh, go to the library when I was a kid, but uh, it's a little bit it, it was different because I remember that at that time, umm, we had uh, an instructor there that she helped us to uh, summarize, umm, the.

✓ Yes, I used to go to the library when I was a kid, but it was a little different because I remember that at that time, we had an instructor there who helped us to summarize.

The phrase 'it's a little bit it, it was different' is redundant and confusing; 'it was a little different' is correct. Also, 'that she helped us' is incorrect; 'who helped us' is the proper relative pronoun for people. The sentence was incomplete and has been completed for clarity.

× Yes, umm, they do, because it is positive value in our culture and parents and teachers encourage umm, children, uh, to participate in Group study and other uh, activities in the library from their childhood because they believe that it is.

✓ Yes, they do, because it is a positive value in our culture, and parents and teachers encourage children to participate in group study and other activities in the library from their childhood because they believe it is important.

The phrase 'it is positive value' is missing the article 'a'. 'Group study' should not be capitalized unless it is a proper noun. The sentence ends abruptly with 'because they believe that it is.' which is incomplete; adding 'important' completes the thought. Also, unnecessary fillers like 'umm' and 'uh' are removed for clarity.