图书馆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự mạch lạc và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp cũng như từ vựng chưa chính xác. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng hơn. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời tự nhiên và logic hơn.

範例: No, I don't go to the library often because there are very few libraries in my city. Instead, I usually use the Internet to find the information I need.

建議: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ, ví dụ 'emerge myself' không đúng, nên dùng 'immerse myself'. Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và nên dùng liên từ để câu văn mạch lạc hơn.

範例: When I am in the library, I usually immerse myself in reading different kinds of books such as novels, science books, and architecture. This helps me relax and gain more knowledge, so I find it very useful.

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có lỗi lặp từ, câu không hoàn chỉnh. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, tránh lặp từ và bổ sung thêm chi tiết để câu trả lời đầy đủ hơn.

範例: To be honest, I didn't go to the library often when I was a kid because I usually spent my time playing with my friends and family.

建議: Bạn nên tránh nói "this question is difficult for me" trong bài thi. Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng, mạch lạc và tránh lặp từ. Hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời logic hơn và bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể hơn.

範例: I think Chinese kids often go to the library because the government invests a lot in building libraries for children. This helps them gain and broaden their knowledge.

× No, not really often, because a library in my in my city is very rare and I think that it's not is uh doesn't like the Internet, which has many uh, information that I wanted to know.

✓ No, not really often, because libraries in my city are very rare and I think that they are not like the Internet, which has a lot of information that I want to know.

The original sentence has errors with 'a library in my in my city is very rare' which is incorrect because 'library' is singular but the meaning implies plural. Also, 'it's not is uh doesn't like the Internet' is grammatically incorrect and unclear. The correction uses plural 'libraries' and corrects the verb forms to match the subject. Use 'a lot of information' instead of 'many uh, information' because 'information' is uncountable.

× When I'm in the library, uh, I usually emerge myself to read any kind of books like novels, science books and structure.

✓ When I'm in the library, I usually immerse myself in reading any kind of books like novels, science books, and architecture.

The phrase 'emerge myself to read' is incorrect. The correct verb is 'immerse' and it should be followed by 'in' plus the gerund form 'reading'. Also, 'structure' is likely intended to be 'architecture' or a similar noun.

× It's give me a sense of relax and more knowledgeable.

✓ It gives me a sense of relaxation and makes me more knowledgeable.

'It's give' is incorrect; the verb should be 'gives' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. 'A sense of relax' is incorrect; the noun form 'relaxation' should be used. 'More knowledgeable' needs a verb to connect it properly, so 'makes me more knowledgeable' is correct.

× To be honest, not really because I usually spend I usually spend my time with my friends and family or to to play most family.

✓ To be honest, not really because I usually spent my time with my friends and family or playing with most of my family.

The question is about the past ('Did you go to the library when you were a kid?'), so the verb should be in past tense 'spent' instead of 'spend'. Also, 'to to play most family' is incorrect; it should be 'playing with most of my family'.

× Chinese government will invest more and more library for children, umm, and young children will go to the library to gain more knowledge and broaden their knowledge to help.

✓ The Chinese government will invest in more and more libraries for children, and young children will go to the library to gain more knowledge and broaden their understanding to help them.

'Invest more and more library' is incorrect; it should be 'invest in more and more libraries' because 'library' is countable and plural is needed. Also, 'broaden their knowledge to help' is incomplete; adding 'understanding' and 'to help them' clarifies the meaning.