图书馆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one reason and a specific detail. Avoid repetition and filler words. Use correct verb forms and pluralization (e.g., 'searching' → 'search', 'informations' → 'information'). Keep it to 2–3 sentences and use a linking word like 'because' or 'so'.

範例: Yes, I often go to the library because I search for new articles and resources related to my work. For example, I usually spend about an hour there each day looking through journals and databases.

建議: Organize your answer with a clear sequence and use correct prepositions and vocabulary. Begin with a topic sentence describing your main activity, then give 1–2 specific steps using linking words (first, then). Replace unclear words ('OPEC system', 'internets things', 'prob') with accurate terms like 'catalogue' and 'online databases'. Keep sentences concise and grammatical.

範例: Usually I search the library catalogue first to find the location of a book. Then I go to the correct shelf to pick it up, and if I need more material I check online databases for related articles.

建議: Use correct tense and clearer phrasing. Start with a direct statement in the past tense ('Yes, I went to the school library'), then provide one specific detail about frequency or routine. Avoid fillers ('umm', 'uh') and unnecessary thanks. Use linking words like 'so' for reasons.

範例: Yes, I went to the school library when I was a child. Every day during break time I would visit the library to read books and do homework.

建議: Avoid generalizations based only on personal experience. Start with a tentative phrase ('I'm not sure, but from my experience...') then explain your limited perspective. Use correct plural/singular forms and concise sentences. Offer a possible reason or admit lack of evidence rather than making absolute claims.

範例: I'm not sure whether Chinese children often go to libraries, but from my own school experience most students were Malay and I rarely saw Chinese classmates there. So I can't say if this is true more broadly.

× I always searching for the new information, new article regarding my works.

✓ I am always searching for new information and new articles regarding my work.

The sentence misses an auxiliary verb for the continuous form; use 'am searching' for present continuous. Also pluralize 'article' to 'articles' to match 'new information' and use 'work' (uncountable) instead of 'works'. Suggestion: use 'I am always searching' or 'I always search' depending on emphasis.

× I always spend about one hour every day, uh in the library looking for the informations.

✓ I always spend about one hour every day in the library looking for information.

Information is an uncountable noun and should not take the plural form 'informations'. Also remove the filler 'uh' and the extra comma. Use 'information' as uncountable.

× The first thing when I reach at the library I always find the book through the system which is we call as OPEC system and after that I go to the shelf book find that the book, find the book and get more informations through the internets things which is prob.

✓ The first thing I do when I reach the library is find the book through the system we call the OPAC system, then I go to the shelves, find the book, and get more information from the internet.

Multiple problems: incorrect word order ('The first thing when I reach at the library' should be 'The first thing I do when I reach the library'), wrong preposition 'at' (use no preposition or 'in'), incorrect phrase 'we call as' (use 'we call the OPAC system' or 'called the OPAC system'), 'shelf book' should be 'shelves' or 'the shelf', repeated 'find the book', 'informations' should be 'information' (uncountable), and 'internets things which is prob' is unclear and ungrammatical; replace with 'from the internet'.

× Did you go to the library when you were a kid? -> During my kids, I always go to the library at my schools.

✓ When I was a child, I always went to the library at my school.

The response should match past time: use 'When I was a child' (not 'During my kids'), and past simple 'went' instead of present 'go'. Use singular 'school' if referring to one school.

× Every, umm, every day there is a time where uh, we call as a rest time.

✓ Every day there is a time that we call rest time.

Use 'that' instead of 'where' for time clauses, remove 'as' after 'call' and unnecessary fillers. 'We call rest time' is sufficient.

× So I take the opportunity to go the library during the rest time.

✓ So I take the opportunity to go to the library during rest time.

Missing preposition 'to' after 'go'. Also 'the rest time' can be 'rest time' or 'the rest period'; consistent article use is needed.

× I don't think so because I only have the experience umm umm during my kid where I go to the library at my school where my school normally all are.

✓ I don't think so because I only had the experience when I was a child going to the library at my school, which was mostly Malay.

Tense mismatch: refer to past ('had', 'was a child', 'going'). 'During my kid' is incorrect; use 'when I was a child'. 'Where my school normally all are' is ungrammatical—clarify as 'which was mostly Malay'.

× All of us is a Malay so I can't see the Chinese child go to the library at all.

✓ All of us were Malay, so I did not see Chinese children going to the library at all.

Subject-verb agreement: 'All of us is' should be 'All of us were'. 'A Malay' is incorrect; use 'Malay' as an adjective or 'Malay students'. 'Chinese child' should be plural 'Chinese children' to match generalization. Use past tense 'did not see' to match context and 'going' for activity.