鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more natural and concise. Use correct grammar and avoid redundancy. For example, say "I don't like buying shoes often because I think it's a waste of money. I prefer to spend on things I need more. I only buy new shoes when my old ones are worn out."

範例: I don't like buying shoes often because I think it's a waste of money. I prefer to spend on things I need more. I only buy new shoes when my old ones are worn out.

建議: Improve your answer by using clearer sentences and linking words. Avoid filler words and be more specific. For example, "Yes, I often buy shoes online, especially on the Taobao app, which is a popular Chinese shopping platform. The shoes usually match the size and pictures shown on the app, making it easy to shop."

範例: Yes, I often buy shoes online, especially on the Taobao app, which is a popular Chinese shopping platform. The shoes usually match the size and pictures shown on the app, making it easy to shop.

建議: Try to speak more fluently and clearly. Use complete sentences and avoid filler words. For example, "I usually spend only about $5 or $6 on shoes because I just want them to be comfortable. I don't like to waste money on expensive shoes."

範例: I usually spend only about $5 or $6 on shoes because I just want them to be comfortable. I don't like to waste money on expensive shoes.

建議: Your answer is good but can be improved by using linking words and clearer grammar. For example, "I prefer comfortable shoes because fashionable shoes can hurt your feet if they are not comfortable. Comfortable shoes can be worn every day and everywhere without pain."

範例: I prefer comfortable shoes because fashionable shoes can hurt your feet if they are not comfortable. Comfortable shoes can be worn every day and everywhere without pain.

× Maybe when my shoes old and I buy new.

✓ Maybe when my shoes are old, I buy new ones.

The sentence lacks the verb 'are' to link the subject 'shoes' and the adjective 'old'. Also, 'new' should be 'new ones' to refer to new shoes. In English, plural nouns need appropriate verbs and pronouns to agree in number.

× I think I can put my money to buy anything else that I need more than buy shoes.

✓ I think I can spend my money on anything else that I need more than buying shoes.

The verb 'put' is incorrectly used with 'money' here; 'spend money on' is the correct phrase. Also, 'than buy shoes' should be 'than buying shoes' to maintain parallel structure after 'more than'.

× I used to buy shoes online specially on Taobao app, it's a China app to buy something.

✓ I used to buy shoes online, especially on the Taobao app; it's a Chinese app to buy things.

'Specially' should be 'especially' to indicate emphasis. 'China app' should be 'Chinese app' as adjectives for countries are formed this way. Also, 'something' is vague; 'things' is more appropriate here.

× I usually buy yeah shoes on that app and it really easy and it's come with the same size and the same photo like they put on the app and yes.

✓ I usually buy shoes on that app, and it is really easy. The shoes come in the same size and have the same photos as shown on the app.

'Yeah' is unnecessary and informal here. 'It really easy' lacks the verb 'is'. 'It's come' should be 'they come' to agree with plural 'shoes'. 'Like they put' should be 'as shown' for clarity.

× I but shoes just I can, umm, wear it comfortably.

✓ I buy shoes just so I can wear them comfortably.

'But' should be 'buy'. 'It' refers to shoes, which is plural, so 'them' is correct. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× I don't waste my money on the shoes much and.

✓ I don't waste my money on shoes much.

The definite article 'the' is unnecessary before 'shoes' in this general statement. The sentence ends abruptly; removing 'and' completes the thought.

× If you bought a fashion shoes and you can't wear it comfortably, it's make your feet hurt.

✓ If you buy fashionable shoes and you can't wear them comfortably, they will make your feet hurt.

'A fashion shoes' is incorrect; 'shoes' is plural and needs no 'a'. 'Fashion' should be 'fashionable' as an adjective. 'It' should be 'them' to agree with plural 'shoes'. 'It's make' should be 'they will make' for correct subject-verb agreement and tense.

× But if you bought a comfortable shoes, you will, umm, use it every day.

✓ But if you buy comfortable shoes, you will use them every day.

'A comfortable shoes' is incorrect; 'shoes' is plural and does not take 'a'. 'Bought' should be 'buy' to match the conditional tense. 'It' should be 'them' to agree with plural 'shoes'.

× You can, uh, wear it everywhere and it won't hurt your feet.

✓ You can wear them everywhere and they won't hurt your feet.

'It' refers to 'shoes', which is plural, so 'them' and 'they' are correct pronouns to use.