鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by avoiding awkward phrases like 'your shoes' and 'in every time'. Also, keep your sentences concise and directly answer the question. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

範例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes because I like to match my footwear with different outfits. I usually buy new shoes every two months, depending on the occasion.

建議: Focus on making your sentences grammatically correct and complete. Avoid incomplete sentences and unclear references like 'some of what'. Use linking words to explain reasons clearly.

範例: Yes, I have bought shoes online many times. Although I had to return some pairs due to poor quality or uncomfortable high heels, most of the time I keep the shoes and like them very much.

建議: Avoid filler words like 'uh' and unclear phrases such as 'too late'. Also, correct the word 'Sue's' to 'shoes'. Be more confident and clear in your response.

範例: I haven't counted exactly, but I think I spend around $100 on shoes each year. I really like shoes and find it hard to resist buying new ones.

建議: Make your answer more structured and avoid incomplete sentences. Use linking words like 'however' or 'on the other hand' to contrast ideas. Also, correct grammar mistakes such as 'a occasion' to 'an occasion'.

範例: It depends on the occasion. For short events, I prefer fashionable shoes that match my outfit. However, for daily use, I choose comfortable shoes because they are easier to wear for long periods.

× I love to buy your shoes because I like to wear matching footwear in every time and I used to wear different type of footwear on a different occasion.

✓ I love buying shoes because I like to wear matching footwear every time and I use different types of footwear on different occasions.

The phrase 'love to buy' is better expressed as 'love buying' to indicate a habitual action. 'In every time' is incorrect; it should be 'every time' without 'in'. 'Used to wear' implies a past habit, but the context suggests a current habit, so 'use' is appropriate. Also, 'different type' should be plural 'different types' to agree with plural 'footwear' occasions.

× I love to buy your shoes because I like to wear matching footwear in every time and I used to wear different type of footwear on a different occasion.

✓ I love buying shoes because I like to wear matching footwear every time and I use different types of footwear on different occasions.

The use of 'your shoes' is incorrect as the student is talking generally about shoes, not shoes belonging to the examiner. It should be 'shoes' without 'your'.

× I usually purchase in every two-month or you can say it.

✓ I usually purchase every two months, or you could say so.

The phrase 'in every two-month' is incorrect; it should be 'every two months' to indicate frequency. Also, 'you can say it' is awkward; 'you could say so' is more natural.

× Yes, lots of time I bought it from online, though some of what which I should return because of the poor quality or the higher heels.

✓ Yes, many times I have bought shoes online, though some I had to return because of poor quality or high heels.

'Lots of time' should be 'many times' to indicate frequency. 'Bought it from online' is incorrect; 'bought shoes online' is correct. 'Some of what which I should return' is ungrammatical; it should be 'some I had to return'. 'The higher heels' should be 'high heels'.

× Yes, lots of time I bought it from online, though some of what which I should return because of the poor quality or the higher heels.

✓ Yes, many times I have bought shoes online, though some I had to return because of poor quality or high heels.

The preposition 'from' is unnecessary before 'online'. The correct phrase is 'bought shoes online'.

× But majority of time I keep it and I like it very much because of.

✓ But most of the time I keep them and I like them very much.

'Majority of time' should be 'most of the time'. 'I keep it' is unclear; 'them' refers to shoes. The sentence ends abruptly with 'because of' which is incomplete and should be removed.

× I actually never counted, but uh, I guess approximately I might spend, uh, $102.00, uh, for a year.

✓ I have never actually counted, but I guess I spend approximately $102.00 per year.

'Never counted' is better expressed as 'have never counted' to indicate experience up to now. 'Might spend' is uncertain; 'spend' is better for habitual action. 'For a year' should be 'per year'.

× But yes, I like Sue's a lot and I can't resist myself.

✓ But yes, I like shoes a lot and I can't resist myself.

'Sue's' is a mispronunciation or typo for 'shoes'. 'I can't resist myself' is awkward; however, it is acceptable in informal speech. The main correction is 'Sue's' to 'shoes'.

× Well, it depends on occasion because in a occasion where I need to worry for very little time, I like fashionable ones, which goes with my outfit sometime or you can say in a routine life, I found, uh, more comfortable shoes.

✓ Well, it depends on the occasion because on occasions where I need to worry for very little time, I like fashionable ones that go with my outfit sometimes. Or you could say in routine life, I find more comfortable shoes.

'On occasion' needs the definite article 'the occasion'. 'In a occasion' is incorrect; it should be 'on an occasion' or 'on occasions'. 'Which goes' should be 'that go' to agree with plural 'ones'. 'Sometime' should be 'sometimes'. 'I found' should be 'I find' to indicate habitual action.