鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is generally clear but could be more concise and structured. Avoid redundancy like repeating 'I like those' and clarify the frequency more naturally. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

範例: Yes, I really enjoy buying shoes, especially collecting different colors of Converse and Jordan styles. I usually buy about three pairs each month because I like to have variety.

建議: Try to reduce filler words like 'uh' and 'you know' to sound more fluent. Also, clarify the reason for buying online and name the platforms more clearly. Use linking words to improve flow.

範例: Yes, I often buy shoes online because I live in a city with heavy traffic, which makes it difficult to visit good stores. Therefore, I usually purchase shoes through websites like Digicolor or Snap Pay.

建議: Avoid vague expressions like '10 million' without currency and clarify your point. Also, reduce filler words and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to explain reasons.

範例: I usually spend over 10 million VND on original shoes rather than cheaper copies because original shoes last longer and offer better quality.

建議: Your answer is good but could be more concise and use clearer linking words. Also, avoid awkward phrasing like 'my feet should be in the shoe for too long.'

範例: I prefer fashionable shoes like classic ones for formal occasions, such as wearing with a suit or tuxedo. However, for daily use, I choose comfortable running shoes because they prevent my feet from getting tired.

× Well my favorite part of the clothes are shoes and I really like buying and collecting different colors of the shoes, especially the converse style, I like those.

✓ Well, my favorite part of the clothes is shoes, and I really like buying and collecting different colors of shoes, especially the Converse style; I like those.

The subject 'part' is singular, so the verb should be 'is' not 'are' (singular and plural issue). Also, 'colors of the shoes' is better as 'colors of shoes' to avoid unnecessary articles and plural consistency.

× Or Jordan style.

✓ Or Jordan style.

This is a fragment but not a grammar mistake listed in the problem types, so no correction is made.

× And yes, pretty much 3 * a month I buy a pair of shoes.

✓ And yes, pretty much 3 times a month I buy a pair of shoes.

The phrase '3 * a month' is unclear and should be '3 times a month' to correctly express frequency (singular and plural issue).

× Well, you know, uh, I live in a very heavily traffic city, so I basically, uh, cannot get to the, uh, good shopping stores for, uh, the shoes.

✓ Well, you know, uh, I live in a city with heavy traffic, so I basically, uh, cannot get to the good shopping stores for shoes.

'Heavily traffic city' is incorrect; it should be 'city with heavy traffic' (incorrect use of prepositions). Also, 'the shoes' is unnecessary here; 'shoes' is sufficient.

× So yes, I usually purchase my uh, uh, shoes online and Digicolor or snap pay.

✓ So yes, I usually purchase my shoes online using Digicolor or Snap Pay.

The phrase 'and Digicolor or snap pay' is unclear and should be 'using Digicolor or Snap Pay' to correctly indicate the method (incorrect use of prepositions).

× Well you know, I always tend to buy an original version of the shoe instead of the master quality or high copies.

✓ Well, you know, I always tend to buy an original version of the shoe instead of master quality or high-quality copies.

'High copies' is incorrect; it should be 'high-quality copies' (singular and plural issue). Also, 'the master quality' is better as 'master quality' without 'the'.

× So I usually spend more than 10 million on a shoe.

✓ So I usually spend more than 10 million on shoes.

'On a shoe' is awkward when referring to spending money generally; 'on shoes' is more natural (incorrect use of quantifiers).

× I prefer doing this because it lasts longer when it is original and more expensive.

✓ I prefer doing this because original shoes last longer and are more expensive.

The sentence is awkward; 'it' is unclear. Using plural 'shoes' and clear subject-verb agreement improves clarity (present tense issue).

× Well, I believe every place needs its own style, so I like fashionable shoes, for example classic ones that you can wear with a suit and a tuxedo maybe.

✓ Well, I believe every place needs its own style, so I like fashionable shoes, for example, classic ones that you can wear with a suit and maybe a tuxedo.

Added missing article 'a' before 'tuxedo' (singular and plural issue).

× But for everyday life I prefer a running shoe which is more comfortable and because my feet should be in the shoe for too long, I don't get exhausted.

✓ But for everyday life, I prefer running shoes which are more comfortable, and because my feet are in the shoes for a long time, I don't get exhausted.

'A running shoe' is singular but context suggests plural 'running shoes'. Also, 'my feet should be in the shoe' is incorrect; 'my feet are in the shoes' is correct (singular and plural issue).