鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is generally clear but a bit long and slightly redundant. Try to make your response more concise by directly answering the question first, then adding specific supporting details using linking words for coherence. Also, use plural verbs to agree with plural subjects (e.g., 'they provide' instead of 'it provides').

範例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes and usually purchase new pairs every six months. I prefer brands like Nike and Air Jordan because they provide both comfort and style, which match well with my daily outfits.

建議: Your answer conveys the message but contains some grammatical errors and redundancy. Avoid repeating words (e.g., 'did did') and unnecessary phrases like 'So therefore'. Use linking words appropriately to connect ideas smoothly.

範例: I usually avoid buying shoes online because I once bought an expensive pair from an app that did not fit me well. Therefore, I prefer visiting physical stores to ensure a proper fit.

建議: This answer is unclear and contains errors and irrelevant words ('friendship'). Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence and add specific details about the amount or range you spend. Avoid filler words and ensure grammatical correctness.

範例: To be honest, I usually spend a considerable amount of money on various types of shoes, especially branded ones that offer good quality and comfort.

建議: Your answer is understandable but a bit repetitive and could be more concise. Use linking words like 'because' only once per sentence to avoid redundancy. Also, complete your sentences fully (e.g., 'wearing comfortable shoes').

範例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I can wear them for long periods. Since I invest a lot in expensive shoes, comfort is more beneficial for me.

× Well, I have a habit of collecting shoes of different brands, usually Nike and Air Jordan because it provides comfort as well as they are very stylish to pair with my daily outfits, so I often buy them after six months.

✓ Well, I have a habit of collecting shoes of different brands, usually Nike and Air Jordan, because they provide comfort as well as being very stylish to pair with my daily outfits, so I often buy them every six months.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'it provides' referring to multiple brands, which should be 'they provide' to agree with the plural subject 'shoes of different brands'. Also, 'as well as they are very stylish' is awkward; it is better to use 'as well as being very stylish' to correctly link the ideas.

× Well, I try to avoid buying shoes online because recently I purchased one of the my most expensive shoes online from a app which did did not fit me well.

✓ Well, I try to avoid buying shoes online because recently I purchased one of my most expensive shoes online from an app which did not fit me well.

The phrase 'one of the my most expensive shoes' is incorrect; it should be 'one of my most expensive shoes' without 'the'. Also, 'from a app' is incorrect because 'app' starts with a vowel sound, so it should be 'from an app'. Additionally, the repeated word 'did did' is a typographical error and should be corrected to 'did'.

× So therefore I usually prefer to visit offline stores to have a proper fit.

✓ So, therefore, I usually prefer to visit offline stores to get a proper fit.

The phrase 'to have a proper fit' is less natural; 'to get a proper fit' is the correct collocation in English when referring to trying on shoes to ensure they fit well.

× To be honest I I must friendship I spent a hefty amount of money on different type of shoes.

✓ To be honest, I must admit I have spent a hefty amount of money on different types of shoes.

The original sentence contains nonsensical phrase 'I must friendship' which is incorrect. It should be 'I must admit'. Also, 'different type of shoes' should be pluralized to 'different types of shoes' to agree with the plural noun 'shoes'. Additionally, the tense is corrected to present perfect 'have spent' to indicate an action that has relevance to the present.

× I prefer to buy a comfortable pair of shoes because it allows me to wear for a long time because I spend a considerable amount of money on expensive shoes.

✓ I prefer to buy a comfortable pair of shoes because it allows me to wear them for a long time since I spend a considerable amount of money on expensive shoes.

The original sentence misses the object 'them' after 'wear', which is necessary. Also, using 'since' instead of the second 'because' improves sentence flow and clarity.

× So I believe that wearing a comfortable would be more beneficial for me.

✓ So I believe that wearing comfortable shoes would be more beneficial for me.

The phrase 'wearing a comfortable' is incomplete; 'comfortable' is an adjective and needs a noun to modify. Adding 'shoes' completes the phrase correctly.