鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is quite long and a bit unclear due to grammar mistakes and redundancy. Try to make your response more concise and grammatically correct, and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, specify the frequency clearly.

範例: Yes, I love buying shoes, especially sneakers and boots. Recently, I've started collecting sports shoes as well. I usually buy new shoes every two or three months, often during special occasions or festivals.

建議: Your answer conveys the main idea but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Use linking words to improve coherence and be more precise with vocabulary. Avoid repeating words unnecessarily.

範例: Yes, I often buy shoes online because there are many discounts available. Moreover, online stores usually offer easy returns if the product doesn't match the description or quality. Therefore, I find buying shoes online more convenient than shopping in physical stores.

建議: Your answer is confusing and lacks clarity. Try to organize your response with clear ranges and use appropriate linking words. Also, avoid vague expressions and improve sentence structure.

範例: I usually spend between 2,000 and 5,000 on sneakers. However, when I buy boots, I tend to spend more than 10,000 because they are generally more expensive.

建議: Your answer is relevant and detailed but could be improved by using more natural phrasing and linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, avoid repeating similar phrases.

範例: I prefer comfortable shoes over fashionable ones because I usually exercise at the gym and walk about 20 kilometers daily. Therefore, comfortable shoes are essential for me to stay active and comfortable throughout the day.

× nowadays I collecting sports shoes also

✓ nowadays I am collecting sports shoes also

The verb 'collecting' needs an auxiliary verb 'am' to form the present continuous tense, which is used to describe an action happening currently.

× I buy shoes on every occasion and festival and it's about two or three month

✓ I buy shoes on every occasion and festival and it's about every two or three months

The phrase 'it's about two or three month' is incorrect because 'month' should be plural 'months' to match the quantity, and 'every' clarifies the frequency.

× I often bought shoes online because there are lots of offers applied when you buy online shoes

✓ I often buy shoes online because there are lots of offers applied when you buy shoes online

The adverb 'often' indicates a habitual action, so the present tense 'buy' is appropriate instead of the past tense 'bought'.

× there are also a facility of return the order if you not get exactly same item or a quality approved item

✓ there is also a facility to return the order if you do not get exactly the same item or a quality-approved item

The phrase 'a facility of return' should be 'a facility to return'; also, 'if you not get' is incorrect and should be 'if you do not get'; 'exactly same item' needs the article 'the' before 'same'.

× So it is beneficial to buy shoes online rather than to buy

✓ So it is beneficial to buy shoes online rather than buy them in stores

The phrase 'rather than to buy' is incomplete and awkward; it should be followed by the object or rephrased for clarity.

× I usually spend about 2000 to 10,000 amount of money when I go to buy shoes

✓ I usually spend about 2,000 to 10,000 units of money when I go to buy shoes

The phrase 'amount of money' is awkward here; it's better to specify the currency or say 'units of money'; also, numbers should be formatted with commas for clarity.

× when I like to buy sneakers so it is between the range of two to five

✓ when I like to buy sneakers, the price is between two to five thousand

The phrase 'between the range of two to five' is incorrect; 'between' and 'range' are redundant; also, the unit (thousand) should be specified.

× when I buy boots so it is above the range of 10,000

✓ when I buy boots, the price is above 10,000

The phrase 'above the range of 10,000' is incorrect; 'above 10,000' is sufficient and clearer.

× I prefer comfortable shoes rather than to prefer fashionable shoes

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes rather than fashionable shoes

The phrase 'rather than to prefer' is incorrect; 'rather than' should be followed by the base form without 'to prefer'.

× I usually go to exercise in gym

✓ I usually go to exercise at the gym

The correct preposition for a location like 'gym' is 'at' rather than 'in' when referring to going there to exercise.

× comfortable shoes help me a lot for walking and traveling day-to-day experience

✓ comfortable shoes help me a lot with walking and traveling in my day-to-day experience

The verb 'help' is followed by 'with' when indicating assistance; also, 'traveling day-to-day experience' needs prepositions to clarify meaning.

× And I think it is more valuable to prefer comfortable shoes rather than to buy fashionable shoes

✓ And I think it is more valuable to prefer comfortable shoes rather than buy fashionable shoes

Similar to a previous error, 'rather than' should be followed by the base verb without 'to'.