鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer wa eigo no shizen-sa ga tarinai desu. Tatoeba, 'shoe bag' ya 'shoe legs' wa machigatte imasu. Motto seikaku ni, jisho-teki na tango o tsukatte, kotae o 5-bun no naka de shourai shite kudasai. Mata, 'uh' nado no filler wa sakete kudasai.

範例: Yes, I like buying shoes, but I don't buy them often because they are expensive. I usually choose shoes that match my outfit, such as white, black, or blue ones. I prefer colorful shoes sometimes to add variety.

建議: Kotae no bunpou to tango no shiyou ga fumei de, rikai ga muzukashii desu. 'Yacht' ya 'did online are very benefits' wa machigatte imasu. Shizen de wakari yasui eigo de, rikai shi yasui you ni kotaete kudasai.

範例: Yes, I have bought all my shoes online. Technology makes it very convenient to shop, so I always buy shoes from online stores.

建議: Kotae ga fukuzatsu de, bunpou no machigai ga arimasu. 'It's really to spend' wa fumei desu. Motto seikaku ni, setsumei o shite, 5-bun ijou ni shinai you ni shite kudasai.

範例: Usually, I spend around 3000 to 5000 yen on shoes. Since 5000 yen is quite expensive, I often buy second-hand shoes to save money.

建議: Kotae ga fumei de, tango no shiyou mo machigatte imasu. 'Some Chai iron wine' wa imi ga wakarimasen. Kotae wa seikaku ni shite, rikai shi yasui you ni shite kudasai.

範例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I walk a lot and don't want foot problems. However, nowadays, you can find shoes that are both comfortable and fashionable.

× Yes, I like to buy shoe bag.

✓ Yes, I like to buy shoe bags.

The word 'shoe' should be plural 'shoes' when referring to multiple items, and 'bag' should be plural 'bags' if talking about more than one. Here, 'shoe bag' is likely intended as 'shoe bags' to match the context.

× I don't often buy shoe because, uh, shoes are very uh, expensive and I want to uh, buy shoe legs, uh, to suit my outfit.

✓ I don't often buy shoes because shoes are very expensive and I want to buy shoe laces to suit my outfit.

The word 'shoe' should be plural 'shoes' when referring to multiple items. Also, 'shoe legs' is incorrect; the correct term is 'shoe laces'.

× Uh, I wear white, black, blue or something like more colorful.

✓ I wear white, black, blue, or something more colorful.

The phrase 'something like more colorful' is incorrect; it should be 'something more colorful' to correctly express the idea.

× Yacht the shoes I have are all buy in online.

✓ Actually, the shoes I have are all bought online.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and verb form. 'Yacht' is likely a mishearing or typo for 'Actually'. 'Buy in online' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'bought online'.

× Technology, now I did online are very benefits to buying something, so I always buy my shoe from online.

✓ Technology now makes online shopping very beneficial, so I always buy my shoes online.

The sentence has incorrect verb forms and structure. 'I did online are very benefits' is incorrect. The corrected sentence uses proper verb forms and clearer structure.

× so I always buy my shoe from online.

✓ so I always buy my shoes online.

The word 'shoe' should be plural 'shoes' when referring to multiple items. Also, 'from online' is incorrect; 'online' alone suffices.

× Usually I spend around ¥3000 and 5000, but it's really to spend umm, 5000 is very expensive so I only uh, buy second hand and like, umm.

✓ Usually I spend around ¥3000 to ¥5000, but spending ¥5000 is very expensive, so I only buy second-hand items.

The phrase 'around ¥3000 and 5000' is incorrect; it should be 'around ¥3000 to ¥5000'. Also, 'buy second hand and like' is incomplete and unclear; corrected to 'buy second-hand items'.

× Some Chai iron wine fashionable shoes but I have some less problem.

✓ Some are very fashionable shoes, but I have some problems with them.

The original sentence is unclear and has incorrect structure. 'Some Chai iron wine fashionable shoes' is nonsensical; corrected to a clearer sentence.

× I heard that when I walk many so I'm prefer comfortable shoes.

✓ I heard that when I walk a lot, so I prefer comfortable shoes.

'When I walk many' is incorrect; it should be 'when I walk a lot'. Also, 'I'm prefer' is incorrect; it should be 'I prefer'.

× But you can buy a comfortable and fashionable too nowadays so you don't have to be.

✓ But nowadays, you can buy shoes that are both comfortable and fashionable, so you don't have to choose.

The original sentence is incomplete and has incorrect conjunction use. The corrected sentence clarifies the meaning and improves conjunction usage.