鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Javobingiz tabiiy va aniq, lekin "wanna" kabi norasmiy so'zlardan foydalanishdan saqlaning va gapni yanada rasmiyroq qiling. Shuningdek, "twice a month" o'rniga "twice a month" deb aniqroq ifodalash yaxshiroq bo'ladi.

範例: Yes, I like buying shoes and usually purchase them twice a month because I want to wear the latest trending sneakers.

建議: Javobda grammatik xatolar va takrorlanishlar mavjud. "Faulty project" iborasi noto'g'ri, "faulty product" deb to'g'ri aytilishi kerak. Gapni qisqaroq va aniqroq qilib, takrorlanishlardan qoching.

範例: Yes, I have bought shoes online once, but when I received them, I found that the size was too big and the color was different from what I ordered.

建議: Javobda mavzudan chalg'ish va chalkashlik bor. Savolga to'g'ridan-to'g'ri javob bering va xarajat miqdorini aniqroq ifodalang. "No" so'zidan boshlash noto'g'ri, chunki savolga ijobiy javob berish kerak.

範例: I usually spend about $200 on shoes each month, and I buy shoes two or three times a week.

建議: Javobda ko'p "uh" so'zlari va noaniqlik bor. Gaplarni qisqaroq va aniqroq qilib, bog'lovchi so'zlardan foydalaning. "Come winning" iborasi noto'g'ri, uni to'g'ri ifodalash kerak.

範例: From my point of view, fashionable shoes are important for meetings or special occasions, but I prefer comfortable shoes because I want to feel comfortable all day.

× I like purchasing twice a month because I wanna wear trending sneakers, you know?

✓ I like buying shoes twice a month because I want to wear trending sneakers, you know?

The verb 'purchasing' is a present participle and is incorrectly used here without a proper auxiliary verb. The correct form is the gerund 'buying' to express a habitual action. Also, 'wanna' is informal and should be 'want to' in formal speech.

× Yes, I have bought shoes online once. However, when I received them I realized that they were faulty project because the size was too big and the color is the color was not what I ordered.

✓ Yes, I have bought shoes online once. However, when I received them, I realized that they were faulty products because the size was too big and the color was not what I ordered.

The word 'project' is incorrect; it should be 'products'. Also, 'is the color was' is a redundancy and incorrect tense; it should be 'was'. The past tense is required to describe completed actions.

× No, actually I'm really keen into buying shoes, especially twice or three times a week, and I spent about 3 or $200.

✓ No, actually I'm really keen on buying shoes, especially twice or three times a week, and I spend about $300 or $200.

The correct preposition after 'keen' is 'on', not 'into'. Also, 'spent' is past tense but the context suggests habitual action, so 'spend' is correct. The amount '3 or $200' is unclear; it should be '$300 or $200'.

× And from my point of view, I can say that fashionable shoes are really important, especially when you are, uh, going to meeting or, uh, some special, uh, jobs or groups.

✓ From my point of view, I can say that fashionable shoes are really important, especially when you are going to meetings or some special events or groups.

The phrase 'going to meeting' is incorrect; it should be 'going to meetings'. Also, 'jobs or groups' is unclear; 'events or groups' fits better. The sentence structure is improved by removing unnecessary fillers and conjunctions.

× But I prefer comfortable shoes because, uh, I wanna feel myself comfortable come winning.

✓ But I prefer comfortable shoes because I want to feel comfortable when winning.

The reflexive pronoun 'myself' is incorrectly used here; it should be omitted. Also, 'come winning' is incorrect; 'when winning' or 'while winning' is appropriate. 'Wanna' should be 'want to' in formal speech.