鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more natural and concise. Avoid repeating phrases like 'whenever I get a time' twice. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly, for example, 'However' to contrast ideas. Try to use more precise vocabulary such as 'occasionally' instead of 'whenever I get a time'.

範例: Yes, I love buying shoes, but I only do so occasionally because I often run out of money. However, when I buy shoes, I choose colors that match my dresses.

建議: Your answer is clear but can be more natural and fluent. Avoid repeating 'online shopping' multiple times. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' to connect ideas. Also, correct grammar mistakes such as 'prefer go' to 'prefer to go'.

範例: No, I haven't bought shoes online because I prefer to shop in person so that I can see and feel the shoes before buying.

建議: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words such as 'because' and 'therefore' to connect ideas. Also, be more specific about the amount or proportion of money spent to enrich your answer.

範例: I usually spend about the same amount of money on shoes as I do on clothes because I believe shoes are equally important for my overall appearance.

建議: Avoid filler words like 'uh' and use more natural expressions such as 'comfort' instead of 'comfortability'. Use linking words like 'because' to explain your preference clearly. Also, try to make your sentences more concise and fluent.

範例: I usually prefer comfortable shoes over fashionable ones because, at the end of the day, comfort is more important than style, especially to avoid sore feet.

× Whenever I get a time and extra amount of money, I'd love to buy shoes.

✓ Whenever I get time and an extra amount of money, I'd love to buy shoes.

In English, we do not use 'a' before 'time' when referring to an unspecified amount of time. Also, 'an' is needed before 'extra amount' because 'amount' starts with a vowel sound. So, the correct phrase is 'get time and an extra amount of money'. This is a common preposition and article usage issue in English.

× But whenever I get a time, I buy shoes according to the colors that I have dresses of.

✓ But whenever I get time, I buy shoes according to the colors of the dresses that I have.

The phrase 'colors that I have dresses of' is incorrect because the preposition 'of' is misplaced. The correct structure is 'colors of the dresses that I have'. Also, 'a time' should be 'time' as explained before. This is a preposition usage error.

× No, I'm not kind of an online person because I do not believe in online shopping.

✓ No, I'm not the kind of online person because I do not believe in online shopping.

The phrase 'not kind of an online person' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'not the kind of online person'. The definite article 'the' is necessary here to specify the kind. This is an incorrect use of pronouns and articles.

× I prefer go to the place in person and having that particular ornament or the shoes in my hand.

✓ I prefer to go to the place in person and have that particular ornament or the shoes in my hand.

The verb 'prefer' should be followed by the infinitive form 'to go' not just 'go'. Also, parallel structure requires 'have' instead of 'having'. This is a verb form and preposition usage error.

× I usually spend the money that I uh, spend for my clothes.

✓ I usually spend the money that I uh, spend on my clothes.

The correct preposition to use with 'spend' in this context is 'on', not 'for'. So, it should be 'spend money on my clothes'. This is a preposition usage error.

× I usually go for comfortable shoes than fashionable shoes because at the end of the day you should uh, end up with comfortability rather than being fashionable and having very irritating and hurtful feet.

✓ I usually go for comfortable shoes rather than fashionable shoes because at the end of the day you should uh, end up with comfort rather than being fashionable and having very irritating and hurtful feet.

The phrase 'go for comfortable shoes than fashionable shoes' is incorrect; it should be 'go for comfortable shoes rather than fashionable shoes' to express preference. Also, 'comfortability' is not a standard English word; 'comfort' is correct. This is an error in conjunction use and adjective form.