鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Jawaban Anda kurang jelas dan terdapat banyak pengulangan kata seperti 'uh'. Cobalah untuk memberikan jawaban yang lebih langsung dan terstruktur dengan kalimat utama yang jelas, serta detail yang spesifik. Hindari pengulangan dan gunakan kalimat yang lebih alami.

範例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes, but I don't buy them very often because I try to save money. Usually, I buy a new pair once a year and use them for two or three years.

建議: Jawaban Anda kurang jelas dan tidak lengkap, serta terdapat banyak pengulangan dan kesalahan kata. Cobalah untuk menjawab dengan kalimat yang lengkap dan jelas, serta gunakan kata penghubung untuk membuat jawaban lebih koheren.

範例: Yes, I have bought shoes online before. The prices were cheaper than in physical stores, so I prefer shopping online for better deals.

建議: Jawaban Anda kurang jelas dan terdapat kesalahan dalam penggunaan kata. Cobalah untuk menyatakan jumlah uang dengan jelas dan gunakan kosakata yang tepat untuk membandingkan harga.

範例: I usually spend around one million rupiahs on shoes, which I think is quite cheap compared to other brands.

建議: Jawaban Anda mengandung pengulangan dan kalimat yang tidak lengkap. Cobalah untuk memberikan alasan yang jelas dan kalimat yang lebih terstruktur tanpa pengulangan kata.

範例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I wear them for long periods and want to avoid discomfort during daily activities.

× Honestly, I like having many issues, but uh, I don't have so much money in my pocket.

✓ Honestly, I like having many shoes, but uh, I don't have much money in my pocket.

The word 'issues' is incorrect in this context; it should be 'shoes' to match the topic. Also, 'so much money' is better expressed as 'much money' in negative sentences for natural English usage.

× So, uh, I usually buy shoes around, uh, one year and then I use for two years or three years.

✓ So, uh, I usually buy shoes once a year and then I use them for two or three years.

The phrase 'buy shoes around one year' is incorrect; 'once a year' is the correct quantifier for frequency. Also, 'I use for two years' lacks an object; 'them' is needed to refer to shoes.

× Yes, of course. I have a book exit from uh online store and the price was very cheap.

✓ Yes, of course. I have bought shoes from an online store and the price was very cheap.

The phrase 'have a book exit' is incorrect; the correct past participle form is 'have bought'. Also, 'a book exit' is nonsensical in this context.

× Then I uh buy from uh the offline uh uh shop and uh it it is very.

✓ Then I buy from an offline shop and it is very good.

The phrase 'the offline uh uh shop' should be 'an offline shop' for correct article usage. The sentence is incomplete; adding 'good' completes the thought.

× Easily every I buy shoes, the price is around when million and I think that a price is uh chips uh, compared to uh, other uh shoes and.

✓ Every time I buy shoes, the price is around one million and I think that price is cheap compared to other shoes.

The phrase 'Easily every I buy shoes' is incorrect; 'Every time I buy shoes' is correct. 'When million' should be 'one million'. 'Chips' is a mispronunciation of 'cheap'.

× If I have to choose one those options, I will choose comfortable shoes because uh, I will use uh, Asus for a long time, for a long term and I will use uh, many times and then.

✓ If I have to choose one of those options, I will choose comfortable shoes because I will use them for a long time and many times.

'One those options' should be 'one of those options'. 'Asus' is likely a mispronunciation of 'shoes'. 'For a long term' should be 'for a long time'. 'I will use many times' needs an object; 'them' refers to shoes.