鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer needs to be clearer and more natural. Try to avoid repetition and grammatical errors. Also, provide a direct response first, then add supporting details using linking words. For example, mention how often you buy shoes and why, in a concise way.

範例: Yes, I really like buying shoes, especially sneakers. I usually buy a new pair every few months, but I wait for sales to get a better price.

建議: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid confusing phrases. Also, complete your sentences fully.

範例: Yes, I have bought shoes online recently. For example, I purchased a limited edition pair of Puma sneakers from their official website because I wanted to ensure authenticity.

建議: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and unclear. Try to give a direct answer first, then explain with specific details. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and avoid redundancy.

範例: I usually spend around 10,000 to 12,000 rupees on shoes because I save specifically for my sneaker collection, which is my biggest hobby.

建議: Your answer is confusing and has grammatical errors. Try to clearly state your preference and explain why, using linking words to connect your ideas logically. Avoid repeating phrases and unclear terms.

範例: I prefer comfortable shoes because they are essential for daily activities and provide support. However, fashionable shoes are also popular nowadays, so sometimes I choose them for special occasions.

× Well, I am very big sneaker head in my home.

✓ Well, I am a very big sneaker head in my home.

The sentence is missing the indefinite article 'a' before the singular noun phrase 'very big sneaker head'. In English, singular countable nouns require an article or determiner. Adding 'a' corrects the singular noun usage.

× Obviously I like to purchase some new pair of shoes, but I I waited for a sale so I often buy a shoes in a couple of months for.

✓ Obviously I like to purchase some new pairs of shoes, but I wait for a sale so I often buy shoes every couple of months.

The phrase 'some new pair of shoes' is incorrect because 'pair' is singular and 'some' implies plural. It should be 'some new pairs of shoes' or 'a new pair of shoes'. Also, 'a shoes' is incorrect because 'shoes' is plural and does not take 'a'. The sentence also had tense inconsistency; 'waited' should be 'wait' to match the habitual action.

× Obviously I like to purchase some new pair of shoes, but I I waited for a sale so I often buy a shoes in a couple of months for.

✓ Obviously I like to purchase some new pairs of shoes, but I wait for a sale so I often buy shoes every couple of months.

The phrase 'a shoes' is incorrect because 'shoes' is plural and does not take the article 'a'. It should be just 'shoes'. Also, 'in a couple of months for' is awkward; 'every couple of months' is the correct expression.

× Obviously I like to purchase some new pair of shoes, but I I waited for a sale so I often buy a shoes in a couple of months for.

✓ Obviously I like to purchase some new pairs of shoes, but I wait for a sale so I often buy shoes every couple of months.

The verb 'waited' is in past tense, but the context indicates a habitual action, so present tense 'wait' is appropriate.

× Yes, I have both recently a fair of Puma.

✓ Yes, I have bought recently a pair of Puma shoes.

The original sentence is incomplete and incorrectly structured. 'Have both recently a fair of Puma' is unclear. The correct past participle 'bought' is needed after 'have' to form present perfect tense. Also, 'a fair of Puma' is incorrect; it should be 'a pair of Puma shoes'.

× They loans are very limited edition on their side.

✓ Their shoes are very limited edition on their site.

'They loans' is incorrect; likely intended 'their shoes'. 'Loans' is unrelated here. Also, 'on their side' should be 'on their site' referring to the website.

× So I checked immediately on their site and both from the from its side and it's a legit site.

✓ So I checked immediately on their site, and bought from their site because it's a legit site.

The phrase 'both from the from its side' is incorrect and unclear. The correct preposition is 'from their site'. Also, 'both' is unnecessary here.

× Talking about spending money on my shoes, I prefer to spend my savings because I save, save for sneakers especially.

✓ Talking about spending money on my shoes, I prefer to spend my savings because I save especially for sneakers.

The repetition 'save, save' is redundant. The phrase 'especially for sneakers' should be placed correctly to modify 'save'.

× It's my biggest hobby so I say save the 10 to 12,000.

✓ It's my biggest hobby so I save around 10,000 to 12,000.

'I say save the 10 to 12,000' is incorrect. The verb 'say' is unnecessary. Also, 'the 10 to 12,000' is incorrect quantifier usage; 'around 10,000 to 12,000' is better.

× Well, this opinion varies time to time because comfortable shows very essentially in our daily lives and provide us to provide us with comfort generally during on our tariffs.

✓ Well, this opinion varies from time to time because comfortable shoes are very essential in our daily lives and provide us with comfort generally during our tasks.

'Comfortable shows' should be 'comfortable shoes' (plural noun). 'Varies time to time' should be 'varies from time to time'. 'Provide us to provide us' is redundant; should be 'provide us with'. 'Tariffs' is incorrect in context; likely meant 'tasks' or 'activities'.

× But on the other hand, fashionable shoes is very popular among these days.

✓ But on the other hand, fashionable shoes are very popular these days.

'Fashionable shoes is' is incorrect subject-verb agreement; 'shoes' is plural, so verb should be 'are'. 'Among these days' is incorrect; correct phrase is 'these days'.