鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答は質問に直接答えていますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現が多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。具体的な理由や頻度を明確にし、自然な英語表現を使うことが必要です。例えば、"I don't like buying shoes very much. I usually buy shoes once a year because I prefer buying other clothes like hats and T-shirts."のように簡潔で明確に答えましょう。

範例: I don't like buying shoes very much. I usually buy shoes once a year because I prefer buying other clothes like hats and T-shirts. I find those items more interesting and useful for my style.

建議: 回答は質問に答えていますが、文法の誤りや意味が不明瞭な部分があります。オンラインで買わない理由を明確にし、自然な表現を使うことが大切です。例えば、"I have never bought shoes online because I prefer to see and try them in a store to make sure they fit well."のように答えましょう。

範例: I have never bought shoes online because I prefer to see and try them in a store to make sure they fit well. This way, I can avoid buying the wrong size or style.

建議: 回答は具体的な金額を示しており良いですが、文法や表現が不自然です。収入と支出の関係を明確にし、自然な英語で答えましょう。例えば、"I usually spend about 10,000 yen on shoes because I earn 70,000 yen from my part-time job, so I have to be careful with my budget."のように答えると良いです。

範例: I usually spend about 10,000 yen on shoes because I earn 70,000 yen from my part-time job, so I have to be careful with my budget. I prefer to buy affordable but good quality shoes.

建議: 回答は質問に答えていますが、文法の誤りや冗長な表現があります。理由を簡潔に述べ、自然な英語で表現しましょう。例えば、"I prefer comfortable shoes because I walk a long distance to and from university every day, so comfort is very important to me."のように答えましょう。

範例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I walk a long distance to and from university every day, so comfort is very important to me. Fashion is less important than feeling good while walking.

× I don't like buying shoes, I usually buy other once a year because I prefer buying other outfit like a ho hat and AT shirt.

✓ I don't like buying shoes; I usually buy other outfits once a year because I prefer buying other outfits like a ho hat and an AT shirt.

The word 'other' should be followed by a plural noun 'outfits' to match the meaning. Also, 'once a year' should be placed correctly, and articles like 'a' should be used before singular countable nouns like 'ho hat' and 'AT shirt'.

× Uh, that's why I usually bought at store.

✓ Uh, that's why I usually buy at the store.

The sentence refers to a habitual action, so the present tense 'buy' is appropriate instead of the past tense 'bought'. Also, 'the' is needed before 'store'.

× I usually buy at a store because it can understand where sites and real cover.

✓ I usually buy at a store because I can understand the size and real color.

The original sentence uses incorrect words and prepositions. 'Sites' should be 'size', and 'real cover' should be 'real color'. Also, 'it can understand' is incorrect; it should be 'I can understand'.

× I usually spend 10,000 Japanese yen on shoes and I do part time job and I earn 70,000 Japanese yen so I cannot use much money for shoes.

✓ I usually spend 10,000 Japanese yen on shoes. I do a part-time job and earn 70,000 Japanese yen, so I cannot spend much money on shoes.

The original sentence is a run-on sentence and lacks articles. It should be split into clearer sentences, and 'part time job' should be 'a part-time job'. Also, 'use much money for shoes' should be 'spend much money on shoes'.

× I walk a long way every day to go my university and come back to my house so comfortable shoes that will help me comfortable walk walking so I.

✓ I walk a long way every day to go to my university and come back to my house, so comfortable shoes help me walk comfortably.

The sentence is missing the preposition 'to' after 'go'. Also, 'comfortable walk walking' is incorrect; it should be 'walk comfortably'. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.