鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer should be more natural and grammatically correct. Try to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, and avoid redundancy. For example, you can say when and why you buy shoes, and keep your answer within 5 sentences.

範例: Yes, I like buying shoes, but only when my old ones are worn out. Usually, I buy new shoes once or twice a year to replace damaged pairs. I prefer shoes that are comfortable for daily use.

建議: Try to use more natural phrasing and correct grammar. Use linking words to make your answer coherent. Also, avoid redundancy by not repeating similar ideas.

範例: Yes, I often buy shoes online because it offers good deals and discounts. Moreover, shopping online is convenient and saves time.

建議: Your answer needs to be clearer and grammatically correct. Specify the currency and use linking words to make your answer more coherent. Avoid vague expressions like 'nearly alone'.

範例: I usually don't spend a lot of money on shoes. Typically, I spend around 2000 to 5000 Indian Rupees on a pair, depending on the quality and brand.

建議: Avoid filler words like 'uh' and improve sentence structure. Provide a clear topic sentence and support it with reasons using linking words.

範例: I prefer comfortable shoes most of the time because they are suitable for various occasions. Additionally, comfortable shoes help me avoid foot pain during long walks.

× Yes. Do I like to buy shoes when it's my shoes getting damaged, I will buy new one for my daily life.

✓ Yes. I like to buy shoes when my shoes are getting damaged; I will buy a new one for my daily life.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'Do I like to buy' which is a question form, but the sentence is a statement. Also, 'it's my shoes getting damaged' is incorrect; it should be 'my shoes are getting damaged' to correctly use the present continuous tense. Additionally, 'new one' needs an article 'a' before it. The corrected sentence uses proper verb forms and articles to convey the intended meaning clearly.

× Most of the times I purchase shoes from online 'cause it gets me a good deal and a good offers also.

✓ Most of the time I purchase shoes online because it gets me good deals and good offers as well.

The phrase 'purchase shoes from online' is incorrect; the preposition 'from' should be omitted when referring to buying online. Also, 'Most of the times' should be 'Most of the time' as 'time' is uncountable here. 'A good offers' is incorrect because 'offers' is plural and should not have 'a'. The corrected sentence fixes preposition use, quantifier, and article errors.

× I don't spend lot of money in shoes and nearly alone 2K or 5K nearly spent on my shoes.

✓ I don't spend a lot of money on shoes and usually spend around 2K to 5K on my shoes.

The phrase 'don't spend lot of money' is missing the article 'a' before 'lot'. Also, 'in shoes' should be 'on shoes' as the correct preposition for spending money is 'on'. The phrase 'nearly alone 2K or 5K nearly spent' is awkward and unclear; it is corrected to 'usually spend around 2K to 5K'. These corrections improve quantifier use and preposition accuracy.

× Most of the time I prefer comfortable shoes because it is uh, good to wear uh, in everywhere we are when we are going.

✓ Most of the time I prefer comfortable shoes because they are good to wear everywhere we go.

The phrase 'good to wear uh, in everywhere we are when we are going' is incorrect. 'In everywhere' is wrong; 'everywhere' does not need a preposition. Also, 'it is' should be 'they are' to agree with the plural 'shoes'. The corrected sentence uses proper pronoun agreement and removes unnecessary prepositions for clarity.