鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to use clearer and more natural English sentences. For example, start with a direct answer, then explain with specific reasons. Avoid vague phrases like 'something like that' and use correct vocabulary such as 'shoes' instead of 'show'.

範例: Yes, I like buying shoes occasionally. I usually buy them when I have a party, go to a restaurant, or need them for school. However, buying shoes is not very important to me.

建議: Use consistent verb tenses and clearer linking words. Also, avoid repeating 'sometime' and 'something like that'. Be specific about your preferences and reasons.

範例: Yes, I sometimes buy shoes online from Taobao in China. However, I often prefer buying shoes at the market because the prices are good and I can try them on before buying.

建議: Be more precise and avoid unclear phrases like 'sketch out' and 'something like that'. Use linking words to connect ideas and explain your spending habits clearly.

範例: I usually spend around $20 to $30 on shoes because I don't think they are very important. However, sometimes I spend more on good brands like Skechers, especially when I go to restaurants or special events.

建議: Focus on clear and correct sentence structure. Avoid confusing phrases like 'it can make me feel sad' when you mean the opposite. Use linking words to compare your preferences.

範例: I prefer comfortable shoes because they allow me to walk anywhere easily and feel good. However, fashionable shoes are also important for special occasions like parties or restaurants.

× I delight by the show, but sometimes I buy it because I must have a party or go to restaurant and sometime go to school, something like that, but I think it's not important to me.

✓ I delight in shoes, but sometimes I buy them because I must have some for a party or to go to a restaurant and sometimes to go to school, something like that, but I think it's not important to me.

The pronouns 'it' and 'show' are incorrectly used. 'Show' should be 'shoes' and 'it' should be 'them' to refer to plural shoes. Also, 'delight by' should be 'delight in'. The preposition 'to' is missing before 'restaurant'. The word 'sometime' should be 'sometimes' to indicate frequency.

× Yes, sometime I buy it from Taobao in China, but sometime I often buy it in market and something like that because I think it's in the market, it have a good price and you can test it.

✓ Yes, sometimes I buy them from Taobao in China, but sometimes I often buy them in the market and something like that because I think in the market, they have a good price and you can test them.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrectly used for plural 'shoes'; it should be 'them'. 'Sometime' should be 'sometimes' to indicate frequency. 'Market' needs the definite article 'the'. 'It have' is incorrect; 'they have' is correct for plural subject. 'Test it' should be 'test them' to refer to shoes.

× Around 20 or $30.00, because I don't want to spend a lot for this because I think it's not important. But sometimes I just spend for a good one, like sketch out and almost when I go to restaurant and something like that, I must try a good one, yes.

✓ Around $20 or $30, because I don't want to spend a lot on this since I think it's not important. But sometimes I just spend on a good one, like Skechers, and almost when I go to a restaurant or something like that, I must try a good one, yes.

The amount should include the dollar sign before the number. 'Spend for' should be 'spend on'. 'Sketch out' seems to be a mishearing or misspelling of 'Skechers', a shoe brand. 'Go to restaurant' needs the article 'a'. 'Almost when' is unclear; 'almost always when' or 'especially when' would be better, but kept as 'almost when' to preserve original meaning.

× Maybe he I choose a comfortable shoe because comfortable shoe is important to me because it can make me feel sad and I can go anywhere that I want to go.

✓ Maybe I choose a comfortable shoe because a comfortable shoe is important to me since it can make me feel safe and I can go anywhere that I want to go.

The phrase 'he I choose' is incorrect; 'I choose' is correct. 'Comfortable shoe' needs the article 'a' before it. 'Make me feel sad' is likely a mistake; 'make me feel safe' fits the context better. 'Because' is repeated unnecessarily; 'since' is used to improve flow.

× It's so fast. But fashion is important too because when you go to restaurant and occasion or have a party, you must have the shoe too.

✓ It's so comfortable. But fashion is important too because when you go to a restaurant, an occasion, or have a party, you must have the shoes too.

'It's so fast' is likely a misuse; 'comfortable' fits better. 'Go to restaurant and occasion' needs articles: 'a restaurant' and 'an occasion'. 'The shoe' should be plural 'the shoes' to match context. Commas are added for clarity in the list.