鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is relevant but can be more natural and concise. Avoid repeating the frequency and try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, clarify your points with specific reasons.

範例: Yes, I like buying shoes because they can enhance my outfit. I usually buy new shoes once a year, but if my shoes get damaged or dirty, I might buy them sooner depending on my mood.

建議: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to explain reasons and examples clearly. Also, be specific about your experience.

範例: Yes, I often buy shoes online from international websites because they offer many discounts. For example, I bought a pair of Puma shoes for 2000 rupees, although the original price was 5000 rupees.

建議: Your answer is unclear and lacks coherence. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use linking words and be specific about the amount you spend.

範例: I usually spend a considerable amount on shoes because they can change my entire outfit and impression. Typically, I spend around 10,000 to 15,000 rupees on a good pair.

建議: Avoid filler words and unclear phrases like 'that's a tree'. Provide a clear opinion and explain your preference with linking words and specific reasons.

範例: That's an interesting question. I prefer shoes that are both fashionable and comfortable because stylish shoes boost confidence, while comfort is essential for daily wear.

× Yes, I like buying shoes because they can change their outfit.

✓ Yes, I like buying shoes because they can change my outfit.

The pronoun 'their' is used incorrectly here as it refers to a plural subject, but the speaker is referring to their own outfit. The correct possessive pronoun is 'my' to match the singular first person subject.

× I can buy the shoes once in a year.

✓ I can buy shoes once a year.

The phrase 'once in a year' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'once a year'. Also, 'the shoes' is too specific here; 'shoes' without 'the' is more appropriate when speaking generally.

× If the shoes are dirty and get damaged I will buy once in a year or depends on mood.

✓ If the shoes are dirty and get damaged, I will buy them once a year or depending on my mood.

The modal verb phrase 'will buy once in a year' is awkward; it should be 'will buy them once a year'. Also, 'depends on mood' is incomplete; it should be 'depending on my mood' to correctly express the condition.

× Yes, uh, regularly abroad choose from online because uh, they have many offers and promoters to apply the shoes to get discount discount.

✓ Yes, I regularly choose to buy shoes online from abroad because they have many offers and promotions to get discounts.

The original sentence lacks a clear subject and verb structure. 'Regularly abroad choose from online' is incorrect; it should be 'I regularly choose to buy shoes online from abroad'. Also, 'promoters to apply the shoes to get discount discount' is unclear and should be 'promotions to get discounts'.

× Uh, for example, I got, I got my shoes, uh, Puma shoes like 2000, which is uh original prices 5000.

✓ For example, I got my Puma shoes for about 2000, which originally cost 5000.

The phrase 'like 2000' is informal and unclear; 'for about 2000' is better. 'Original prices 5000' should be 'originally cost 5000' to correctly express past price.

× I usually spend more money on the shoes because shoes can change the entire outfit and why it gives looks for the people so I can change I can spend more money like 10,015 thousand.

✓ I usually spend more money on shoes because shoes can change the entire outfit and improve my appearance, so I can spend more money, like 10,000 to 15,000.

'On the shoes' should be 'on shoes' when speaking generally. 'Why it gives looks for the people' is unclear and should be 'improve my appearance'. The number '10,015 thousand' is incorrect and should be '10,000 to 15,000'.

× I think that's a tree. Really interesting question, but I prefer both fashionable and comfortable shoes because, uh, fashionable shoes are uh, like, uh, it is uh, designed for stylish and confident for the people and comfortable shoes are included in them.

✓ I think that's a very interesting question, but I prefer both fashionable and comfortable shoes because fashionable shoes are designed to make people stylish and confident, and comfortable shoes are included in that.

'That's a tree' is incorrect; it should be 'that's a very'. 'It is designed for stylish and confident for the people' is grammatically incorrect; it should be 'designed to make people stylish and confident'. 'Comfortable shoes are included in them' is unclear; 'included in that' clarifies the meaning.