鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer wa eigo no shizen-sa to seikaku-sa o takameru tame ni, futatsu no koto ni chūmoku shite kudasai. Hitotsu wa, bunpō to hyōgen no seikaku-sa, futatsu me wa, hanashi no rikai o tasukeru tame no meirei-teki na setsumei o fukumeru koto desu. Mata, 'go for go for the train over the Instagram' no you na fukakai na hyōgen wa saisho kara saigo made yoku kangaete, yoku rikai dekiru hyōgen ni kaeru koto o osusume shimasu.

範例: Yes, I really enjoy buying shoes and I do it quite often. I like to keep my footwear neat and clean, and I enjoy changing my shoes to match different occasions.

建議: Kotae no naka de, fukakai na hyōgen ya kotoba no kurikaeshi ga arimasu. Motto meirei de, rikai shi yasui hyōgen o tsukatte kudasai. Mata, setsumei o tsuika suru toki wa, rensetsu-go o tsukatte hanashi no nagare o yoku shite kudasai.

範例: No, I have never bought shoes online because I prefer to feel the material, like leather or fabric, to make sure they are comfortable for my feet. Therefore, I usually go to the store to buy shoes.

建議: Kotae wa chotto fukuzatsu de, kotoba no kurikaeshi ya bunpō no machigai ga arimasu. Motto seikaku de, rikai shi yasui hyōgen o tsukatte, setsumei o rensetsu-go de tsunagete kudasai. Mata, jōhō o motto meikaku ni shite kudasai.

範例: The amount I spend on shoes depends on the brand. Sometimes I buy expensive brands like Nike or Adidas, but other times I choose simple and affordable running or work shoes, depending on the occasion.

建議: Kotae no naka ni fukakai na hyōgen to kotoba no machigai ga arimasu. Motto meirei de, rikai shi yasui hyōgen o tsukatte, setsumei o rensetsu-go de tsunagete kudasai. Tatoeba, 'food footwear' wa 'footwear' no machigai desu. Seikaku na hyōgen o tsukatte kudasai.

範例: To be honest, I like fashionable shoes to some extent, but I always prefer comfortable shoes because comfort is very important for me.

× Yes, it's one of my favorite hobbies to buy a shoes.

✓ Yes, it's one of my favorite hobbies to buy shoes.

The word 'shoes' is plural and does not need an article 'a' before it. Using 'a shoes' is incorrect because 'a' is used with singular countable nouns, but 'shoes' is plural.

× I like to keep it very neat and clean and go for go for the train over the Instagram.

✓ I like to keep them very neat and clean and go for the train over Instagram.

The sentence has repetition ('go for go for') and unclear phrasing. 'It' should be 'them' to refer to shoes (plural). Also, 'the Instagram' is incorrect; 'Instagram' does not need 'the'. The phrase 'go for the train over Instagram' is unclear but corrected minimally here.

× No, I haven't. I didn't like the concept of buying shoes online uh, because I like to feel the leather or any leather or the cloth of the shoes, umm, the inject the comfort within my which within my foot.

✓ No, I haven't. I don't like the concept of buying shoes online because I like to feel the leather or the cloth of the shoes and experience the comfort within my foot.

The original sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly and has unclear phrasing. 'Didn't like' should be 'don't like' to express a current preference. The phrase 'the inject the comfort within my which within my foot' is ungrammatical and is corrected to 'experience the comfort within my foot' for clarity.

× So I prefer going to the store and buying it.

✓ So I prefer going to the store and buying them.

Since 'shoes' is plural, the pronoun should be 'them' instead of 'it'.

× While sometimes I used to I, I want to have simple running shoes or work work shoes, which is quite cheap.

✓ While sometimes I want to have simple running shoes or work shoes, which are quite cheap.

The phrase 'used to I, I want' is incorrect and redundant. 'Work work shoes' is repetitive. Also, 'which is quite cheap' should be 'which are quite cheap' because 'shoes' is plural.

× It depends upon the situation and for which occasion.

✓ It depends on the situation and the occasion.

The phrase 'depends upon' is acceptable but less common; 'depends on' is preferred. Also, 'for which occasion' is awkward; 'the occasion' is clearer.

× Comfort. I cannot let go of my comfort. Uh, and the food footwear is so much essential for my comfort Ness, so I go for comfortable shoes.

✓ Comfort. I cannot let go of my comfort. Uh, and good footwear is very essential for my comfort, so I go for comfortable shoes.

'Food footwear' is a typo and should be 'good footwear'. 'So much essential' is incorrect; 'very essential' or 'so essential' is correct. 'Comfort Ness' should be 'comfort'.