鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and lacks coherence. Try to avoid repeating words like 'formal' twice and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Also, be more specific about how often you buy shoes and why you prefer black shoes.

範例: Yes, I like buying shoes, but I don't buy them very often. Usually, I purchase formal shoes when I have special occasions to attend. For example, I prefer wearing black shoes because they match well with my clothes and make me feel comfortable and well-dressed.

建議: Your answer is unclear and contains many hesitations and filler words. Try to organize your answer logically and use clear vocabulary. Also, explain briefly what attracted you to buy the shoes online.

範例: Yes, I have bought shoes online. Once, while browsing Facebook, I saw an advertisement for blue kids' shoes that caught my attention. Because I liked the design and color, I decided to purchase them.

建議: Your answer is incomplete and contains many pauses and filler words. Try to give a clear and complete response with specific details about your spending habits. Avoid unnecessary hesitations to make your answer more fluent.

範例: The amount I spend on shoes depends on my needs and budget. Usually, when I receive my salary at the beginning of the month, I try to buy good quality shoes, even if they are a bit expensive.

建議: Your answer is relevant but has many hesitations and unclear phrases like 'watchable'. Try to use appropriate vocabulary and link your ideas clearly. Also, explain more about why you choose each type of shoe.

範例: I prefer different shoes depending on the situation. For formal events, I choose fashionable business shoes to look presentable in front of my family and friends. However, for outdoor activities, especially on hot or rainy days, I prefer comfortable shoes to stay relaxed.

× Normally I tend to buy formal shoes during the occasions for example when I would like to attend a formal formal program.

✓ Normally I tend to buy formal shoes on occasions, for example when I would like to attend a formal program.

The preposition 'during' is incorrectly used here; 'on occasions' is the correct phrase to indicate specific events or times. Also, 'formal formal program' has a repeated word which should be corrected.

× I prefer to wear clothes with black pair shoes which make me feel comfortable and all dressed.

✓ I prefer to wear clothes with a pair of black shoes which make me feel comfortable and well dressed.

The phrase 'black pair shoes' is incorrect; it should be 'a pair of black shoes'. Also, 'all dressed' is not idiomatic; 'well dressed' is the correct expression.

× If so, when I was calling down a social media platform, uh, uh, especially Facebook, I found uh, advertisement, uh, who showed uh, kids, uh, uh, blue color, uh, Kate, Kate.

✓ Yes, when I was scrolling down a social media platform, especially Facebook, I found an advertisement showing kids' blue shoes called Kate.

The sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'Calling down' is incorrect; 'scrolling down' is appropriate. 'Advertisement, uh, who showed' should be 'an advertisement showing'. Also, 'kids, uh, uh, blue color, uh, Kate' is unclear and needs rephrasing for clarity.

× So I, it attract my minds and I bought it.

✓ So it attracted my attention and I bought it.

The pronoun usage is incorrect. 'I, it attract my minds' is ungrammatical. The correct phrase is 'it attracted my attention'. Also, 'minds' should be singular 'mind' or better replaced with 'attention'.

× Sometimes whenever I get my salary, especially, uh, and then the first, uh, first week of a month, uh, if I purchase shoes at that time, I really try to, umm, purchase, uh, expensive shoes and uh, during.

✓ Sometimes, whenever I get my salary, especially in the first week of the month, if I purchase shoes at that time, I try to buy expensive ones.

The sentence is incomplete and contains unnecessary fillers. 'And during' is incomplete and should be removed. The sentence is restructured for clarity and conciseness.

× Sometimes I prefer fashionable business shoes because, uh, I want to show myself, uh, watchable in front of my family members and friends.

✓ Sometimes I prefer fashionable business shoes because I want to present myself well in front of my family members and friends.

The phrase 'show myself watchable' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'present myself well'. Also, 'in front of' is correctly used here.