鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is somewhat clear but a bit lengthy and slightly repetitive. Try to make your response more concise and directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, followed by specific supporting details. Also, avoid redundancy like "on the occasions of when"; instead, use simpler phrases. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

範例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes because they provide comfort. I usually purchase them when I need to go out, especially for sports events, to ensure I have the right footwear.

建議: Your answer is understandable but could be improved by correcting grammar and making the response more natural. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid repetition. Also, be specific about your experiences and preferences.

範例: Yes, I have bought shoes online several times, especially when I was short of time to visit the market. Moreover, I prefer Gucci shoes because they are very comfortable.

建議: Your answer is unclear and lacks a direct response to the question about how much money you spend. Try to answer the question directly with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details. Avoid incomplete sentences and repetition. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

範例: I usually spend around 3000 to 5000 rupees on shoes. I enjoy collecting different brands, so I like to invest in quality footwear.

建議: Your answer is good but can be improved by correcting grammar and making the sentence more natural. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific reasons for your preference.

範例: I prefer comfortable shoes because they help me stay focused while running, and I can walk easily outdoors without any discomfort.

× Well, I mostly like buying shoes because it makes me feel more comfortable and usually I buy shoes on the occasions of when I have to go outside and especially in the sports events.

✓ Well, I mostly like buying shoes because it makes me feel more comfortable and usually I buy shoes on occasions when I have to go outside, especially to sports events.

The phrase 'on the occasions of when' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'on occasions when'. Also, 'in the sports events' should be 'to sports events' to indicate attending events. This improves sentence clarity and correctness.

× Definitely yes. There are lots of time when I bought shoes online when I do not have time to go to market.

✓ Definitely yes. There are lots of times when I bought shoes online because I do not have time to go to the market.

The phrase 'lots of time' should be 'lots of times' to indicate multiple occasions. Also, 'go to market' should be 'go to the market' to use the definite article correctly.

× I also like to buy shoes of Gucci brand because it is more comfortable.

✓ I also like to buy shoes of the Gucci brand because they are more comfortable.

The phrase 'shoes of Gucci brand' is incorrect; it should be 'shoes of the Gucci brand' to use the definite article. Also, 'it is more comfortable' should be 'they are more comfortable' because 'shoes' is plural.

× Well I am. I have been fascinated towards buying shoes of different brands as I have a lot of collection of this as well as I also like to spend money on on this.

✓ Well, I am. I have been fascinated by buying shoes of different brands as I have a large collection of them, and I also like to spend money on this.

The phrase 'fascinated towards' is incorrect; it should be 'fascinated by'. 'A lot of collection of this' is awkward; 'a large collection of them' is better. Also, 'on on this' has a repeated preposition and should be 'on this'. These corrections improve clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Well, I mostly prefer to wear comfortable shoes as it helps to me stay focus on running and also I can easily walk outside.

✓ Well, I mostly prefer to wear comfortable shoes as they help me stay focused on running and also I can easily walk outside.

The phrase 'helps to me stay focus' is incorrect. It should be 'help me stay focused'. 'Helps' should be 'help' to agree with plural 'shoes'. 'Stay focus' should be 'stay focused' as 'focused' is the correct adjective form here.