鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more natural and concise by avoiding redundancy and correcting grammar mistakes. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific supporting details using linking words for coherence.

範例: I don't buy shoes very often because I only replace them when my old ones are completely worn out. For example, I usually buy new shoes once or twice a year when the old ones get damaged beyond repair.

建議: Improve fluency by avoiding filler words and repeating phrases. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide more specific details about your experience to make your answer more engaging and natural.

範例: Yes, I bought my last pair of shoes online from a store I can't recall the name of. However, they offered excellent customer service and fast delivery. The shoes were Nike Air Force Ones, and I found them very comfortable and durable.

建議: Avoid repeating ideas and filler words. Provide a clear and direct answer with specific details about your spending habits. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and natural.

範例: I don't spend much money on shoes because I buy them only occasionally. This helps me save money for other important things. Usually, I spend around 200 to 300 dirhams when I do buy shoes.

建議: Try to avoid repeating the same idea and filler words. Use linking words to connect your points and provide specific reasons or examples to support your preference, making your answer more natural and effective.

範例: I prefer comfortable shoes because they make daily activities easier. For instance, when I travel, I choose comfort over fashion since comfortable shoes offer more flexibility and reduce fatigue.

× I'm not like a person who collects shoes often much, but then I do really buy shoes when my old ones get worn out or damage damaged beyond repair.

✓ I'm not a person who collects shoes very often, but I do buy shoes when my old ones get worn out or damaged beyond repair.

The phrase 'often much' is incorrect; 'very often' is the correct quantifier to express frequency. Also, 'damage damaged' is a repetition error; only 'damaged' is needed.

× So yes, uh, I'll, I buy shoes on rare occasions.

✓ So yes, I buy shoes on rare occasions.

The phrase 'I'll, I buy' is incorrect and confusing. 'I buy' is the correct present tense form to express habitual action.

× And do you know when it gets torn out?

✓ And do you know when it gets torn?

The phrasal verb 'torn out' is incorrect in this context; 'torn' alone is appropriate to describe shoes getting damaged.

× Yes, I did uh, my last shoe I bought it from online.

✓ Yes, I did. My last pair of shoes I bought online.

The sentence is awkward and contains redundancy. 'I bought it from online' is incorrect; 'bought online' is correct. Also, 'shoe' should be plural 'pair of shoes' for natural expression.

× I don't remember the store name, but then they provided good quality services as well as the delivery services as well.

✓ I don't remember the store name, but they provided good quality service as well as delivery service.

'Services' is plural but in this context, 'service' as an uncountable noun is more appropriate. Also, 'as well as the delivery services as well' is redundant; 'as well as delivery service' suffices.

× The shoe I bought was Nike Air Force One and it's pretty much good.

✓ The shoes I bought were Nike Air Force Ones and they're pretty good.

'Shoe' should be plural 'shoes' because Nike Air Force Ones are typically referred to in plural. Also, 'it's pretty much good' is awkward; 'they're pretty good' is better.

× I'm not a shoe person who who likes to collect more shoes in my suitcase.

✓ I'm not a shoe person who likes to collect many shoes in my suitcase.

'More shoes' is incorrect here; 'many shoes' is the correct quantifier for countable nouns in this context.

× I buy shoes like in rare occasions, mainly because I can save money and Sprint on other things.

✓ I buy shoes on rare occasions, mainly because I can save money and spend on other things.

The preposition 'like' is incorrect before 'in rare occasions'; 'on rare occasions' is correct. Also, 'Sprint' is a typo and should be 'spend'.

× I do like to purchase shoes.

✓ I do like to purchase shoes.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no correction needed.

× I would prefer uh, comfortable shoes as they provide very much comfort and for my daily life I would love or prefer comfort shoes than fashionable ones.

✓ I would prefer comfortable shoes as they provide a lot of comfort, and for my daily life, I would prefer comfortable shoes over fashionable ones.

'Very much comfort' is awkward; 'a lot of comfort' is better. Also, 'love or prefer comfort shoes than fashionable ones' is incorrect; 'prefer comfortable shoes over fashionable ones' is correct.

× Actually, when I travel I want to be more comfortable rather than be fashionable, so it provides much more flexibility for me as well.

✓ Actually, when I travel, I want to be more comfortable rather than fashionable, so it provides much more flexibility for me as well.

The phrase 'rather than be fashionable' is awkward; 'rather than fashionable' is more natural. Also, a comma after 'travel' improves sentence clarity.