鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，建议简化句子结构，避免重复和不必要的词汇，使用更准确的表达方式。

範例: I usually buy shoes a few times a year because I like to wear them until they are worn out.

建議: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不清晰，建议使用正确的时态和句型，避免语法错误，并且更清楚地表达观点。

範例: Yes, I have bought shoes online several times using apps like Jing Dong and Taobao because the prices are cheaper and the shoes are durable.

建議: 回答中有严重语法和表达错误，建议使用简单明了的句子，准确表达花费金额和理由。

範例: I usually spend about CN¥100 on each pair of shoes because I don't think it's necessary to spend too much money.

建議: 回答中表达不够流畅，句子结构混乱，建议简化句子，使用连接词使表达更连贯。

範例: I definitely prefer comfortable shoes because they help me feel relaxed. For example, wearing sports shoes on normal occasions helps me focus better on my work.

× I don't know, you're like buying shoes if I have enough money.

✓ I don't know, I like buying shoes if I have enough money.

这里的错误是动词形式错误，'you're like buying' 应该是 'I like buying'。'like' 后面接动名词形式，且主语应为第一人称。

× I usually buy shoes a few times a year, because you know, I like to wear the same pair after for long time until this is broken.

✓ I usually buy shoes a few times a year, because you know, I like to wear the same pair for a long time until it is broken.

这里有复数和单数的使用错误，'after for long time' 应改为 'for a long time'，'this is broken' 应改为 'it is broken'，指代鞋子。

× Well, in over past several years, I always about the shoes online like the Jing Dong apps or the Taobao apps,

✓ Well, over the past several years, I have always bought shoes online using apps like Jing Dong or Taobao,

这里时态错误，描述过去持续的动作应使用现在完成时，'always about the shoes online' 语法错误，应改为 'have always bought shoes online'。

× because I think the price is very cheaper and also very durable.

✓ because I think the price is much cheaper and also the shoes are very durable.

'very cheaper' 是错误的比较级用法，'cheaper' 已经是比较级，前面不能加 'very'，应改为 'much cheaper'。

× Multi bodies are usually spend CN¥100 on each pair of shoes because I think there's no need to spend too much money on the shoes so that we can exchange the shoes every country.

✓ Most people usually spend CN¥100 on each pair of shoes because I think there's no need to spend too much money on shoes so that we can replace shoes frequently.

'Multi bodies' 用词错误，应为 'Most people'；'are usually spend' 主谓不一致，应为 'usually spend'；'exchange the shoes every country' 语义不清，改为 'replace shoes frequently' 更合适。

× Well, I may definitely choose the comfortable shoes because they can make me feel relaxed or or every occasional I am, for example, if I wear sports shoes on the normal occasions and that you will make me more focused on the job.

✓ Well, I would definitely choose comfortable shoes because they can make me feel relaxed on every occasion. For example, if I wear sports shoes on normal occasions, they help me focus more on my work.

句中 'or or every occasional I am' 语法错误，改为 'on every occasion'；'that you will make me' 主语错误，应为 'they help me'。