鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

× Oh yes, I already buy bought shoes from online shop for maybe two or three years since it's so convenient and you can deliver to my house directly and you have a seven days return or return so.

✓ Oh yes, I have already bought shoes from online shops for maybe two or three years since it's so convenient and they deliver to my house directly and you have a seven-day return policy.

这里的时间状语“for maybe two or three years”表示从过去持续到现在的动作，应该使用现在完成时态“have bought”，而不是简单过去时“buy bought”。另外，“online shop”应为复数“online shops”，因为通常指多个网店；“you can deliver”应改为“they deliver”，主语应与前文的“online shops”一致；“seven days return”应改为“seven-day return policy”，形容词用法错误。

× I prefer more comfortable shoes than fashion fashionable shoes because, uh, I need to work during, uh, I need to work during my workplace, so I like my shoes more comfortable, though I will choose some shoes that.

✓ I prefer more comfortable shoes than fashionable shoes because I need to work at my workplace, so I like my shoes to be more comfortable, though I will choose some shoes that...

“fashion fashionable shoes”中“fashion”多余，应去掉；“work during my workplace”表达不正确，应改为“work at my workplace”；“I like my shoes more comfortable”应改为“I like my shoes to be more comfortable”，因为“like”后接形容词需用不定式结构。