鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is understandable but has some repetition and grammatical errors. Try to avoid repeating words and make your sentences clearer. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, instead of saying "I I have interest more to work clothes or jewelry rather than shoes," you can say "I am more interested in buying work clothes or jewelry than shoes."

範例: I don't buy shoes very often because I am more interested in work clothes and jewelry. However, I usually purchase shoes when my old ones are worn out or during festival sales because of the discounts.

建議: Your answer has some unclear words and lacks coherence. Avoid filler words like "umm" and unclear phrases like "tried to accelerate" and "didn't try to uh, access it." Use clear vocabulary and linking words to explain your experience logically.

範例: Yes, I bought shoes online about 5 or 6 years ago, but it was a terrible experience. The shoes did not fit me properly, and when I contacted customer service to resolve the issue, they were unhelpful. Therefore, I was very disappointed with the whole process.

建議: Your answer is clear but can be improved by correcting grammar and using linking words. For example, use "I prefer to spend my money on..." instead of "I rather spend my money on..." Also, avoid repeating "shoes" unnecessarily.

範例: I rarely spend much money on shoes because I usually buy them only during sales or when there are good discounts. Instead, I prefer to spend my money on bags, clothing, jewelry, and even makeup or skincare products.

建議: Your answer is good but has some repetition and could be clearer. Avoid repeating words like "which which" and "it makes me it makes." Also, explain your condition briefly and link your ideas smoothly.

範例: I always prefer comfortable shoes rather than fashionable ones because I suffer from plantar fasciitis, which is a tear in the muscles of my foot. This condition makes walking painful, so comfortable shoes are essential for me, especially since I have a business to manage.

× I don't really find myself buying shoes often because I I have interest more to work clothes or jewelry rather than shoes.

✓ I don't really find myself buying shoes often because I am more interested in work clothes or jewelry rather than shoes.

The phrase 'have interest more to' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'be interested in' when expressing preference or interest towards something. Also, 'I I' is a repetition error.

× I buy shoes when when it tears off or when there is good kind of festival discount or sale going on.

✓ I buy shoes when they tear or when there is a good kind of festival discount or sale going on.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrect when referring to 'shoes' which is plural; 'they' should be used. Also, 'tears off' is incorrect; 'tear' is the correct verb form here. The phrase 'good kind of festival discount' needs an article 'a' before 'good kind'.

× Yes, I bought all shoes online like 5-6 years ago and I had a terrible umm experience with it.

✓ Yes, I bought all my shoes online about 5-6 years ago and I had a terrible experience with it.

The phrase 'like 5-6 years ago' is informal; 'about' is more appropriate. Also, 'all shoes' should be 'all my shoes' to specify possession.

× First of all, those shoes didn't fit and when I tried to accelerate, the customer service didn't try to uh, access it.

✓ First of all, those shoes didn't fit and when I tried to return them, the customer service didn't try to help.

The word 'accelerate' is incorrect in this context; likely the intended word is 'return'. Also, 'access it' is incorrect; 'help' or 'assist' is appropriate here.

× I rarely spend any money on shoes. I only buy shoes when it is on sale or I get a good discounts on shoes.

✓ I rarely spend any money on shoes. I only buy shoes when they are on sale or I get good discounts on shoes.

'It is on sale' is incorrect because 'shoes' is plural; 'they are on sale' is correct. Also, 'a good discounts' is incorrect; 'good discounts' without 'a' is correct because 'discounts' is plural.

× I rather spend my money on bags, clothing, jewelry or even makeup or skin care.

✓ I would rather spend my money on bags, clothing, jewelry, or even makeup or skin care.

The phrase 'I rather spend' is incorrect; the modal 'would' is needed to express preference: 'I would rather spend'.

× I will always prefer comfortable shoes over fashionable shoes because I have got plantar fasciitis which which is a tear in our muscles of my foot and it makes me it makes walking harder.

✓ I will always prefer comfortable shoes over fashionable shoes because I have plantar fasciitis, which is a tear in the muscles of my foot and makes walking harder.

The phrase 'which which' is a repetition error. 'Our muscles of my foot' is incorrect; it should be 'the muscles of my foot' to correctly refer to the specific muscles. Also, 'it makes me it makes walking harder' is repetitive; 'makes walking harder' suffices.