鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by avoiding filler words like 'uh' and correcting grammar mistakes. Also, keep your answer concise and directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details using linking words.

範例: Yes, I like buying shoes, but I don't buy them very often because they usually last for six months to a year. Therefore, I typically purchase new shoes once a year.

建議: Avoid filler words and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and provide a clear opinion with reasons.

範例: Yes, I have bought shoes online once, but it was not a good experience because the size did not fit. Therefore, I prefer buying shoes from physical stores rather than online.

建議: Make your answer more coherent by avoiding filler words and unclear phrases. Use linking words to compare different situations and be specific with amounts and contexts.

範例: It depends on the purpose. For office shoes, I try to buy quality ones costing around 5,000 to 6,000 Indian rupees. However, for casual use at home or during leisure time, I usually buy mid-range shoes costing about 2,000 rupees.

建議: Try to avoid filler words and improve sentence flow by using linking words. Also, correct minor grammar mistakes and be concise while providing clear reasons and examples.

範例: I mostly prefer comfortable shoes because I need to feel comfortable when wearing them all day. However, occasionally, when I attend weddings or special occasions, I buy fashionable shoes as well.

× I like shoes, but I don't buy very often or nowadays shoes, uh, durability is a very long, so they stays for a six month or one year.

✓ I like shoes, but I don't buy them very often nowadays because shoes have a long durability, so they stay for six months or one year.

The sentence has singular and plural issues: 'shoes' is plural, so 'they' is correct, but 'stays' should be 'stay' to agree with plural subject 'they'. Also, 'a six month' should be 'six months' because 'months' is plural and no article is needed here. Additionally, 'or nowadays shoes' is awkward; 'nowadays' should be placed before 'I don't buy them very often' for clarity.

× I like shoes, but I don't buy very often or nowadays shoes, uh, durability is a very long, so they stays for a six month or one year.

✓ I like shoes, but I don't buy them very often nowadays because shoes have a long durability, so they stay for six months or one year.

The pronoun 'them' is needed after 'buy' to refer back to 'shoes'. Without 'them', the sentence is incomplete and unclear.

× Yes, I bought shoes online once only uh, but it was not a nice experience because the size uh, when it came, the size doesn't fit so I need to replace it.

✓ Yes, I bought shoes online only once, but it was not a nice experience because the size, when it came, did not fit, so I needed to replace it.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. Since the event happened in the past, 'doesn't fit' should be 'did not fit' and 'need' should be 'needed' to maintain past tense consistency.

× So I prefer buying from the store rather than online.

✓ So I prefer buying from the store rather than buying online.

To maintain parallel structure, 'buying' should be repeated before 'online' or the phrase should be restructured. Alternatively, 'buying from the store rather than online' is acceptable but less clear; adding 'buying' improves clarity.

× I tried to buy a quality shoes in the range of five to 6000 uh Indian rupees.

✓ I try to buy quality shoes in the range of five to 6000 Indian rupees.

'A quality shoes' is incorrect because 'shoes' is plural and cannot be preceded by 'a'. Also, 'tried' should be 'try' to match present tense context. 'Quality shoes' without 'a' is correct.

× I tried to buy a quality shoes in the range of five to 6000 uh Indian rupees.

✓ I try to buy quality shoes in the range of five to 6000 Indian rupees.

The question asks about usual spending, so present tense 'try' is appropriate instead of past tense 'tried'.

× And if it is for my casual use like uh at home or at uh in my leisure time then I try to buy a mid range around 2:00.

✓ And if it is for my casual use, like at home or during my leisure time, then I try to buy mid-range shoes around 2000.

The prepositions 'at' and 'in' are incorrectly used together; 'during' is better for 'leisure time'. Also, 'a mid range' should be 'mid-range shoes' and '2:00' is unclear, likely meaning '2000' rupees.

× then occasionally I buy a fashionable shoes as well.

✓ then occasionally I buy fashionable shoes as well.

'A fashionable shoes' is incorrect because 'shoes' is plural and cannot be preceded by 'a'. The article should be removed.