鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to use correct verb forms and more precise vocabulary. Avoid redundancy and clarify your points with linking words. For example, replace 'enjoying' with 'enjoy', 'corners' with 'colours', and structure your answer to be more coherent and concise.

範例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes because I find it exciting to try on different colours and styles. I usually buy shoes every few months, especially when there is a sale or I find something comfortable. For instance, I recently bought a pair of trainers that I really like.

建議: Improve sentence structure and vocabulary accuracy. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Replace 'corners' with 'colours' or 'designs', and correct grammar mistakes such as 'a red high heels' to 'a pair of red high heels'.

範例: Yes, I often buy shoes online because there are various fashionable styles and colours available. For example, I bought a pair of red high heels for my birthday, which I really love because they match my beautiful red dress perfectly.

建議: Focus on clarity and grammar. Avoid repetition and use linking words to connect ideas. Also, clarify the phrase 'which save my mom' to express your meaning more clearly.

範例: Actually, I haven't thought about it much, but I usually spend about CN¥500 on shoes. I buy shoes two or three times a year because I prefer to invest in good quality pairs that last a long time. This way, I don't need to replace them frequently, which also helps save money.

建議: Use correct verb forms and complete sentences. Use linking words to contrast your preferences clearly. For example, use 'enjoy' instead of 'enjoying' and complete the phrase 'if I want to on my feet all day' to 'if I want to be on my feet all day'.

範例: I enjoy both fashionable and comfortable shoes because I like to dress in different styles. When I want to look trendy, I choose stylish ones; however, if I need to be on my feet all day, I prefer comfortable shoes.

× Yes, I do enjoying buying shoes because I found it exciting to try on different corners and styles.

✓ Yes, I do enjoy buying shoes because I find it exciting to try on different colours and styles.

The verb 'do' should be followed by the base form of the verb, not the '-ing' form. Also, 'found' should be in present tense 'find' to match the present tense context. Additionally, 'corners' is incorrect; the correct word is 'colours' when referring to shoe colours.

× I often buy shoes every month, every few months, especially when there is a sale or at least something comfortable.

✓ I often buy shoes every month or every few months, especially when there is a sale or at least something comfortable.

The phrase 'every month, every few months' is repetitive and unclear; using 'or' clarifies the frequency. The rest of the sentence is acceptable.

× For instance, I bought a pair of trainer.

✓ For instance, I bought a pair of trainers.

The noun 'trainer' should be plural 'trainers' when referring to a pair of shoes.

× Yes, most of the time I buy shoes online because there are various and fashionable styles and corners.

✓ Yes, most of the time I buy shoes online because there are various and fashionable styles and colours.

The word 'corners' is incorrect in this context; the correct word is 'colours' when talking about shoe options.

× I bought a red high heels during my birthday.

✓ I bought red high heels for my birthday.

'High heels' is plural, so 'a' should be removed. Also, 'during my birthday' is better expressed as 'for my birthday'.

× I really love it because I it really goes with my red dress which is really beautiful.

✓ I really love them because they really go with my red dress, which is really beautiful.

The pronouns should agree in number with 'high heels' (plural), so 'it' should be 'them' and 'goes' should be 'go'. Also, a comma is needed before 'which'.

× Actually, I haven't really thought about it before, but I would say about CN¥500 because I usually buy shoes two or three times annually because I prefer to invest in good quality pairs that last a long time.

✓ Actually, I haven't really thought about it before, but I would say about CN¥500 because I usually buy shoes two or three times a year as I prefer to invest in good quality pairs that last a long time.

'Annually' is correct but 'a year' is more natural in spoken English. Also, 'because' is repeated unnecessarily; replacing the second 'because' with 'as' improves sentence flow.

× This way I wouldn't need to replace them frequently, which save my mom.

✓ This way I wouldn't need to replace them frequently, which saves my money.

The phrase 'which save my mom' is incorrect and unclear. It likely intends to say 'which saves my money' or 'which saves me money'. Also, 'save' should be 'saves' to agree with 'which'.

× I enjoying both fashionable and comfortable shoes because I like to dress in different styles.

✓ I enjoy both fashionable and comfortable shoes because I like to dress in different styles.

The verb 'enjoying' is incorrect here; the base form 'enjoy' should be used after the subject 'I'.

× When I want to look trendy I choose stylish one but if I want to on my feet all day, I prefer comfortable one.

✓ When I want to look trendy, I choose a stylish one, but if I want to be on my feet all day, I prefer a comfortable one.

The word 'one' should be preceded by the article 'a' to indicate singular countable nouns. Also, 'want to on my feet' is missing the verb 'be'. Commas are added for clarity.