鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains some grammatical errors. Try to make your sentences more natural and concise. Also, avoid repetition and ensure your ideas are fully expressed. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

範例: Yes, I like buying shoes because they are an important part of my outfit. However, I find it difficult to choose shoes since they express my personality and emotions, so I want to pick the right ones carefully.

建議: Your answer is incomplete and unclear. Try to give a direct response and add supporting details with clear structure. Avoid unnecessary repetition and incomplete sentences.

範例: Yes, I have bought shoes online. About a year ago, I purchased two pairs from an online shop for myself, and the experience was convenient and satisfactory.

建議: Try to reduce filler words like 'umm' and 'uh' to make your answer clearer. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas and provide more specific reasons for your spending habits.

範例: I usually spend about €30 to €40 on shoes, which I think is reasonable considering my salary. I try to manage my budget carefully to balance my expenses.

建議: Your answer is unclear and does not directly address the question. Focus on giving a clear opinion and supporting it with reasons. Use simple and relevant vocabulary to express your preference.

範例: I prefer comfortable shoes because they help me feel relaxed and improve my mood, even if they are not very fashionable.

× Yes, I do because shows are most important part of your outfit.

✓ Yes, I do because shoes are the most important part of your outfit.

The word 'shows' is a misspelling of 'shoes' and 'most important part' requires the definite article 'the' before it. Also, 'shoes' is plural, so it fits the plural verb 'are'.

× But it's so so hard for me because when you are choosing your shoes, it's express your emotions, it's express your personality and it's hard for me to choose it because it's also.

✓ But it's so hard for me because when you are choosing your shoes, it expresses your emotions, it expresses your personality, and it's hard for me to choose because of that.

The pronoun 'it' should be followed by the verb in third person singular form 'expresses' to agree with the subject. Also, the sentence was incomplete and unclear; 'choose it because it's also' was corrected to 'choose because of that' for clarity.

× Yes I do. Probably one year ago I bought 2 shoes online when I had online shop and it was for me, it was for me and I was already out with data. I was.

✓ Yes, I did. Probably one year ago, I bought 2 pairs of shoes online when I had an online shop, and it was for me. I was already out with data.

The response to a past event should use past tense 'did' instead of 'do'. '2 shoes' should be '2 pairs of shoes' to correctly express quantity. Added missing articles and punctuation for clarity.

× Usually I'm spending on shows, umm, about, uh, €3040 on my shoes and, uh, it's good and it's enough I think for now for my, umm, salary.

✓ Usually, I spend about €30-40 on my shoes, and I think it's good and enough for now considering my salary.

'Shows' is a misspelling of 'shoes'. The verb tense is corrected from present continuous 'I'm spending' to simple present 'I spend' for habitual action. The amount is clarified with a dash for range.

× It's enough to spend this money on shows because umm, you need to manage everything with your salary.

✓ It's enough to spend this money on shoes because you need to manage everything with your salary.

Corrected 'shows' to 'shoes'. The preposition 'with' in 'manage everything with your salary' is acceptable but could be better as 'manage everything on your salary' for clarity, but it's not a strict error.

× All movies I can use our nervous lights are important are on threats and it should do much comfortable. Our mood will be also better so you need to choose.

✓ Comfortable shoes are important because they affect our mood and nerves. They should be very comfortable so that our mood will be better, so you need to choose accordingly.

The original sentence is unclear and ungrammatical. It was restructured to convey the intended meaning about the importance of comfortable shoes affecting mood and nerves.