鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

× I buy it. Every seasons so that I can enjoy fashion.

✓ I buy them every season so that I can enjoy fashion.

'Seasons' is plural, so the verb should agree and the pronoun should be plural as well. 'Every seasons' is incorrect; it should be 'every season' (singular) or 'every season' without 's'. Also, 'I buy it' is incorrect because 'shoes' is plural, so 'I buy them' is correct.

× Yes, I have bought some shoes that buy online such as Dozo Tang or Yahoo online shop because it offers me to enjoy shopping more easily rather than.

✓ Yes, I have bought some shoes online from shops such as Dozo Tang or Yahoo online shop because it allows me to enjoy shopping more easily.

The phrase 'that buy online' is incorrect; it should be 'bought online'. Also, 'offers me to enjoy' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'allows me to enjoy'. The sentence ends abruptly with 'rather than' which is incomplete and should be removed or completed.

× I would say I spend money like ¥10,000 on each shoes.

✓ I would say I spend about ¥10,000 on each pair of shoes.

'Shoes' is plural, so 'each shoes' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'each pair of shoes' because 'pair' is singular and refers to two shoes.

× I think it's more reasonable to buy in online rather than physical stores so I usually get it on online shop.

✓ I think it's more reasonable to buy online rather than in physical stores, so I usually get them from online shops.

'Buy in online' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'buy online'. Also, 'get it on online shop' should be 'get them from online shops' to match plural 'shoes' and correct prepositions.

× It's difficult question, but I would say that I prefer fashionable shoes rather than comfortable shoes because I can wear it anywhere I go and I don't have to care about how do I do looks.

✓ It's a difficult question, but I would say that I prefer fashionable shoes rather than comfortable shoes because I can wear them anywhere I go and I don't have to care about how I look.

'Difficult question' needs an article 'a'. 'Wear it' is incorrect because 'shoes' is plural, so 'wear them' is correct. The phrase 'how do I do looks' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'how I look'.