鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to avoid hesitation and repetition to make your answer sound more natural and fluent. Use clear and concise sentences, and provide specific details about your preferences and buying habits. For example, mention what types of shoes you like and why, and how often you buy them.

範例: Yes, I really enjoy buying shoes, especially colourful ones because they brighten up my outfits. I usually purchase new shoes every two months to keep my collection fresh and up to date.

建議: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains repetition. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words. Also, use correct verb tenses and avoid redundancy.

範例: I usually prefer to look at shoes in physical stores, but if I find a good sale online, I would rather buy them online because it's more convenient and often cheaper.

建議: Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Provide a clear and direct answer with specific reasons. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

範例: I usually don't spend a lot of money on shoes because I like to update my collection frequently. Buying expensive shoes would be a financial burden for me, so I prefer affordable options.

建議: Your answer is relevant but contains hesitation and some redundancy. Try to be more concise and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Also, avoid filler words to improve fluency.

範例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I spend most of my time at work as a dental nurse. Comfortable shoes make my daily life much easier and less tiring.

× I really enjoy checking shoes and buying it.

✓ I really enjoy checking shoes and buying them.

The pronoun 'it' is singular, but 'shoes' is plural. Therefore, the correct pronoun should be 'them' to agree in number with the plural noun 'shoes'.

× I, I, I'm fan of shoes and I really like colorful, uh, SH shoes.

✓ I, I, I'm a fan of shoes and I really like colourful, uh, SH shoes.

The phrase 'I'm fan' is missing the indefinite article 'a' before 'fan'. Also, 'colorful' should be spelled 'colourful' in British English.

× Generally I often buy, uh, purchase shoes, umm, like every two months I can say.

✓ Generally, I often buy or purchase shoes, umm, like every two months, I can say.

The sentence is mostly correct but adding 'or' between 'buy' and 'purchase' improves clarity. Also, commas improve readability.

× Generally I I look shoes on the store and if I find if I found any sale online I would rather buy online than store.

✓ Generally, I look at shoes in the store and if I find any sale online, I would rather buy online than in the store.

The verb 'look' requires the preposition 'at' when referring to objects. Also, 'on the store' should be 'in the store'. The phrase 'if I find if I found' is redundant; 'if I find' suffices. 'Than store' should be 'than in the store' for clarity.

× Well, I don't spend a lot of money on shoes because as I told you before, I I I keep update myself.

✓ Well, I don't spend a lot of money on shoes because, as I told you before, I keep myself updated.

The phrase 'keep update myself' is incorrect. The correct form is 'keep myself updated' to indicate maintaining current knowledge or style.

× I like to wear fresh shoes so if I get expensive ones it will be financially burdened.

✓ I like to wear fresh shoes, so if I get expensive ones, it will be a financial burden.

The adjective 'financially' is an adverb and cannot modify 'burden' which is a noun. The correct adjective form is 'financial'. Also, 'a' is needed before 'financial burden'.

× Now I'm working as a dental nurse and before that I'm a dentist.

✓ Now I'm working as a dental nurse and before that I was a dentist.

The phrase 'before that I'm a dentist' incorrectly uses present tense 'I'm'. The past tense 'I was' is appropriate to indicate a previous occupation.

× So, uh, most of time I spend my time on work.

✓ So, uh, most of the time I spend my time at work.

The phrase 'most of time' is missing the definite article 'the'. Also, the correct preposition with 'work' in this context is 'at'.

× Uh, that's why I generally choose the comfortable pairs because it's, umm, it's making my life easier in everyday life.

✓ Uh, that's why I generally choose comfortable pairs because they make my life easier every day.

'The comfortable pairs' is better as 'comfortable pairs' without 'the' unless specifying particular pairs. 'It's making' is present continuous but here simple present 'they make' is more appropriate. Also, 'in everyday life' is better expressed as 'every day'.