鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it could be more concise and natural by avoiding redundancy such as "I'm happy to have four or five pairs of shoes and I don't need more. And that's it." Also, try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

範例: Yes, I like buying shoes, but not as often as clothes because I only need a few pairs. For instance, I usually keep around four or five pairs, which is enough for me.

建議: Your answer addresses the question but contains some grammatical errors and unclear phrases, such as "I would know if they fit more me" and "That's something I can experience online" which seems contradictory. Try to clarify your points and use linking words to improve coherence.

範例: Yes, I have bought shoes online, but I prefer shopping in physical stores because I can try them on to check the fit and appearance. Therefore, I am not a big fan of buying shoes online.

建議: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains errors, especially the phrase "Things I usually get a virgin," which is confusing. Also, avoid vague expressions like "I spent all the money in the past." Try to be specific and clear, and use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

範例: In the past, I used to spend a lot on shoes because I was very enthusiastic about them. However, now I am more careful and usually spend around $100 or less on a pair.

建議: Your answer is clear and relevant, but some word choices like "Comfortability" and "a fashionable shoes" are incorrect. Also, the sentence about being "not that model or an actor" could be more naturally expressed. Try to use appropriate vocabulary and linking words for better flow.

範例: I always prioritise comfort over fashion when choosing shoes because I want them to protect my feet and support my posture. Unlike models or actors, I don't need to follow the latest trends, so fashion is less important to me.

× I would know if they fit more me or if they look good on me.

✓ I would know if they fit me more or if they look good on me.

The preposition 'more' is incorrectly placed before 'me'. The correct phrase is 'fit me more', where 'more' modifies the verb phrase and should come after the object 'me'.

× That's something I can experience online.

✓ That's something I can't experience online.

The original sentence contradicts the intended meaning. The student means they cannot experience the fitting and appearance of shoes online. The modal verb 'can' should be negated to 'can't' to express inability.

× So I'm not a big fan of of buying shoes online.

✓ So I'm not a big fan of buying shoes online.

There is a repeated preposition 'of of'. The correction removes the duplicate 'of' to maintain proper prepositional phrase structure.

× I spent all the money in the past since I was crazy about shoes, but these days I'm wiser.

✓ I used to spend all the money in the past since I was crazy about shoes, but these days I'm wiser.

The simple past 'I spent' is less appropriate here because the action was habitual in the past. The phrase 'used to spend' better expresses past habitual actions that no longer occur.

× Things I usually get a virgin.

✓ Usually, I get new shoes.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Things I usually get a virgin' is incorrect in structure and word choice. The intended meaning is likely that the student usually buys new shoes. The correction clarifies and corrects the sentence structure.

× Comfortability is always my priority.

✓ Comfort is always my priority.

'Comfortability' is not a standard English word. The correct noun form is 'comfort'. Using 'comfort' makes the sentence natural and grammatically correct.

× I'm not that model or an actor who needs to have a fashionable shoes.

✓ I'm not a model or an actor who needs to have fashionable shoes.

The article 'a' is incorrectly used before the plural noun 'shoes'. When referring to plural nouns, no article or 'some' is used. Also, 'that model' is better as 'a model' for general reference.