鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by avoiding filler words like 'umm' and 'uh'. Also, directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons. For example, explain how often you buy shoes and why your frequency has changed recently. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

範例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes, but recently I don't buy them often because I am very busy with work. Since I have less free time, I rarely find the chance to shop for shoes.

建議: Focus on clarity and correct grammar. Avoid redundancy and filler words. Start with a clear topic sentence, then explain why you prefer buying shoes online, using linking words to connect your ideas. Be specific about the benefits of online shopping.

範例: Yes, I have bought shoes online because it is convenient. I can easily browse many styles, compare prices, and have the shoes delivered to my home.

建議: Make your answer more structured and clear by avoiding filler words and incomplete sentences. Start with a direct answer about your spending habits, then explain with specific details and reasons. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

範例: The amount I spend on shoes varies. Sometimes I buy cheaper shoes to save money, but when I want sneakers, I prefer to spend more for comfort and convenience.

建議: Try to complete your sentences and organize your ideas clearly. Start with a clear preference, then explain why with specific reasons and examples. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

範例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I often go hiking and traveling. Sneakers are comfortable and affordable, which makes them suitable for my activities.

× Yes, I like buying shoes, but umm, nowadays I'm not wary.

✓ Yes, I like buying shoes, but umm, nowadays I'm not buying.

The word 'wary' is incorrect in this context; the student likely meant 'buying'. The verb tense is present continuous to describe current habits, so 'I'm not buying' is appropriate.

× I rally buying shoe because, uh, I don't have time and I don't have the chance to use.

✓ I rarely buy shoes because, uh, I don't have time and I don't have the chance to use them.

The word 'rally' is a mispronunciation of 'rarely'. 'Shoe' should be plural 'shoes' because it refers to multiple items. Also, 'use' needs an object, so 'use them' is correct.

× It's more because I work a lot at work and it's not easy to make.

✓ It's mainly because I work a lot, and it's not easy to find time.

The sentence is unclear and awkward. 'At work' is redundant after 'I work a lot'. 'It's not easy to make' is incomplete; likely intended 'make time' or 'find time'.

× Yes, of course, I have ever brought to online, so obtains because it's easy for me to choose many shoe the ties up many shoe and also, uh, I can compare the price, uh online and it's easy to me to deliver.

✓ Yes, of course, I have bought shoes online because it's easy for me to choose many shoes, and also, uh, I can compare prices online and it's easy for me to get them delivered.

'Have ever brought to online' is incorrect; correct form is 'have bought shoes online'. 'Shoe' should be plural 'shoes'. 'The ties up many shoe' is unclear and removed. 'Compare the price' should be 'compare prices'. 'Easy to me to deliver' should be 'easy for me to get them delivered'.

× To be honest, it's different to buy the to spend money to buy a shoes because sometimes I, umm, try to save some money and try to buy the, uh, cheaper shoe.

✓ To be honest, the amount I spend on shoes varies because sometimes I try to save money and buy cheaper shoes.

'Different to buy the to spend money to buy a shoes' is incorrect and confusing. Correct phrasing is 'the amount I spend on shoes varies'. 'A shoes' is incorrect; 'shoes' is plural and does not need 'a'. 'Cheaper shoe' should be plural 'cheaper shoes'.

× But if I would like to buy sneaker, I just uh, would like to be a convenient, so I try.

✓ But if I would like to buy sneakers, I just want them to be convenient, so I try.

'Would like to buy sneaker' should be 'would like to buy sneakers' (plural). 'Would like to be a convenient' is incorrect; it should be 'want them to be convenient'. The modal verb 'would like' is used correctly but the sentence structure needs correction.

× I prefer comfortable shoe because it's good for me to choose the sneaker, It's comfortable and affordable because it's good for me for hiking and traveling that I like if I have a good shoes I.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes because it's good for me to choose sneakers. They're comfortable and affordable, which is good for hiking and traveling, which I like if I have good shoes.

'Comfortable shoe' should be plural 'comfortable shoes'. 'The sneaker' should be plural 'sneakers'. 'A good shoes' is incorrect; 'shoes' is plural and does not take 'a'. The sentence is fragmented and needs restructuring for clarity.