鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 답변이 다소 중복되고 어색한 표현이 있습니다. 문장을 간결하고 자연스럽게 구성하며, 구체적인 빈도나 이유를 명확히 설명하는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes, but I try to limit how often I buy them. Usually, I purchase shoes only when I need comfortable ones for daily use.

建議: 답변이 불완전하고 문장이 끊겨서 의미 전달이 어렵습니다. 완전한 문장으로 경험을 구체적으로 설명하는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: Yes, I bought a pair of shoes online during my school years, about 10 to 20 years ago. Unfortunately, it was a bad experience because the shoes did not fit well.

建議: 답변이 모호하고 반복적인 표현이 많습니다. 구체적인 금액이나 비교를 통해 명확하고 자연스럽게 답변하는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: In the past, shoes were cheaper, but now they are quite expensive, especially sneakers. I usually spend a considerable amount when I buy new shoes.

建議: 문법과 발음 오류가 있고, 문장이 자연스럽지 않습니다. 명확한 문장 구조와 적절한 어휘 사용으로 답변을 개선해야 합니다.

範例: I prefer fashionable shoes for special events or gatherings, but for daily life, I usually choose comfortable sneakers.

× Yes, I like buying shoes, but I tend to set a limit about that because when I uh start to buy SH buy shoes, I can control myself.

✓ Yes, I like buying shoes, but I tend to set a limit about that because when I start buying shoes, I can't control myself.

The phrase 'start to buy' is grammatically correct but 'start buying' is more natural and common in English. Also, 'can control myself' contradicts the intended meaning; it should be 'can't control myself' to express lack of control. The error relates to the use of verb forms and modal verb meaning.

× Yes, I had one spy shoes online in uh, my school year.

✓ Yes, I bought one pair of shoes online during my school years.

The phrase 'had one spy shoes' is incorrect. The correct past tense verb for purchasing is 'bought'. Also, 'spy shoes' seems to be a mishearing or typo; 'pair of shoes' is appropriate. 'In my school year' is better expressed as 'during my school years'. This corrects verb tense and noun usage.

× That was about uh, 10 to 20 years ago. It was a failure because it.

✓ That was about 10 to 20 years ago. It was a failure because of that.

The sentence 'It was a failure because it.' is incomplete and lacks clarity. Adding 'because of that' completes the thought and improves sentence structure.

× Uh, there was something, uh, cheaper in the past, but nowadays the every, uh, shoes, including sneakers are becoming very expensive.

✓ Uh, things were cheaper in the past, but nowadays every shoe, including sneakers, is becoming very expensive.

'There was something cheaper' is vague; 'things were cheaper' is clearer. 'The every shoes' is incorrect; 'every shoe' is correct as 'every' is used with singular countable nouns. Also, subject-verb agreement corrected to 'is becoming'. This addresses quantifier and agreement errors.

× When I when I have a good events or special uh gathering, I wear fancy shoes.

✓ When I have a good event or a special gathering, I wear fancy shoes.

'A good events' is incorrect because 'events' is plural and 'a' is singular. Changing 'events' to 'event' matches the singular article 'a'. This corrects pronoun and article usage.

× But in daily life I don't like that and go to just for a sneak.

✓ But in daily life, I don't like that and just go for sneakers.

The phrase 'go to just for a sneak' is ungrammatical and unclear. Correcting to 'just go for sneakers' makes the sentence clear and grammatically correct. This fixes sentence structure and word choice.