鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Jawaban Anda terlalu panjang dan berulang, serta kurang terstruktur dengan baik. Cobalah untuk membuat kalimat yang lebih singkat dan langsung ke inti, serta hindari pengulangan kata seperti 'actually' dan 'because'.

範例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes because there are many types and styles available, which makes shopping interesting for me.

建議: Jawaban Anda kurang jelas dan tidak lengkap. Hindari penggunaan kata-kata seperti 'uh' dan pastikan kalimat selesai dengan baik. Gunakan kata penghubung untuk membuat jawaban lebih koheren.

範例: Yes, I have bought shoes online several times, but I prefer shopping in stores because I can try them on to check the fit.

建議: Jawaban Anda agak bertele-tele dan tidak selesai dengan baik. Hindari pengulangan kata dan gunakan kalimat yang lebih jelas serta lengkap. Berikan contoh yang spesifik dan gunakan kata penghubung untuk memperjelas alasan Anda.

範例: The amount I spend on shoes varies depending on the type. For instance, I spend more on formal shoes for work or special occasions.

建議: Jawaban Anda tidak lengkap dan mengandung pengulangan serta kata pengisi seperti 'uh'. Pastikan untuk menyelesaikan kalimat dan memberikan alasan yang jelas dengan menggunakan kata penghubung.

範例: It depends on the situation. For casual outings, I prefer fashionable shoes, but for long walks, I choose comfortable ones.

× there are a lot types of shoes

✓ there are a lot of types of shoes

The phrase 'a lot types' is missing the preposition 'of' which is necessary to correctly link 'a lot' with the plural noun 'types'. The correct phrase is 'a lot of types'. Frasa 'a lot types' kurang preposisi 'of' yang diperlukan untuk menghubungkan 'a lot' dengan kata benda jamak 'types'. Frasa yang benar adalah 'a lot of types'.

× a lot of different models and also different range of prices actually

✓ a lot of different models and also different ranges of prices actually

The word 'range' should be plural 'ranges' because it refers to multiple categories or levels of prices. When talking about various types or categories, the plural form is required. Kata 'range' harus dalam bentuk jamak 'ranges' karena merujuk pada beberapa kategori atau tingkat harga. Saat membicarakan berbagai jenis atau kategori, bentuk jamak diperlukan.

× Maybe some, several times. I both use online.

✓ Maybe some, several times. I both bought online.

The verb 'use' is in present tense but the context is about past actions ('Have you ever bought shoes online?'). Therefore, the past tense 'bought' should be used to match the question. Kata kerja 'use' dalam bentuk sekarang tetapi konteksnya tentang tindakan di masa lalu ('Have you ever bought shoes online?'). Oleh karena itu, bentuk lampau 'bought' harus digunakan agar sesuai dengan pertanyaan.

× However I'm more to buying shoes, uh, offline or in store because it gives me the chance to try them, fits them and.

✓ However, I prefer buying shoes offline or in store because it gives me the chance to try them and see if they fit.

The phrase 'I'm more to buying' is incorrect; 'I prefer buying' is more natural. Also, 'fits them' is incorrect; it should be 'see if they fit'. The conjunction 'and' should connect two complete ideas. Frasa 'I'm more to buying' tidak benar; 'I prefer buying' lebih alami. Selain itu, 'fits them' salah; harusnya 'see if they fit'. Kata sambung 'and' harus menghubungkan dua ide lengkap.

× different situation requires different range of price

✓ different situations require different ranges of price

Both 'situation' and 'range' should be plural because the sentence talks about multiple situations and multiple price ranges. Also, 'price' should be pluralized to 'prices' to match 'ranges'. Baik 'situation' dan 'range' harus dalam bentuk jamak karena kalimat membicarakan beberapa situasi dan beberapa rentang harga. Selain itu, 'price' harus dijamakkan menjadi 'prices' agar sesuai dengan 'ranges'.

× when I'm looking for a formal shoes

✓ when I'm looking for formal shoes

The article 'a' should not be used before the plural noun 'shoes'. When referring to plural nouns, no article or 'some' is used instead. Artikel 'a' tidak boleh digunakan sebelum kata benda jamak 'shoes'. Saat merujuk pada kata benda jamak, tidak menggunakan artikel atau menggunakan 'some'.

× I believe we people are, uh, are in needs for that difference different kind of shoes

✓ I believe we people are, uh, in need of different kinds of shoes

The phrase 'in needs for' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'in need of'. Also, 'difference different kind' is redundant and incorrect; it should be 'different kinds'. Frasa 'in needs for' salah; ekspresi yang benar adalah 'in need of'. Selain itu, 'difference different kind' berlebihan dan salah; harusnya 'different kinds'.

× I prefer a casual shoes, a fashionable use

✓ I prefer casual shoes, fashionable ones

The article 'a' should not be used before plural noun 'shoes'. Also, 'use' is incorrect; it should be 'ones' to refer back to 'shoes'. Artikel 'a' tidak boleh digunakan sebelum kata benda jamak 'shoes'. Selain itu, 'use' salah; harusnya 'ones' untuk merujuk kembali ke 'shoes'.