鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but there are some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing that affect naturalness. For example, 'comfortable one like sneaker or flat' should be 'comfortable ones like sneakers or flats.' Also, 'doesn't cause discomfort' should be 'don't cause discomfort' to agree with the plural subject. Try to use more varied vocabulary and correct subject-verb agreement to improve your fluency and accuracy.

範例: Yes, I really enjoy buying shoes, especially comfortable ones like sneakers or flats. I prefer these over high heels because they are much easier to walk in and don't cause discomfort. Although heels can look attractive, I find them difficult to wear for long periods, so I usually avoid them.

建議: Your answer repeats the examiner's question unnecessarily and contains some unclear phrases, such as 'pure of Puma shoes.' Also, the last sentence is incomplete. To improve, avoid repeating the question, use clear and correct vocabulary, and complete your thoughts. Adding linking words will also help coherence.

範例: Yes, I often buy clothing items online because it is very convenient; you can shop anytime and anywhere. Recently, I purchased a pair of Puma shoes after searching for them for a long time. Although they were quite expensive, I decided to buy them because of their quality.

建議: Your answer is relevant but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'What I usually don't spend a lot of money on shoes.' Also, 'everyday' should be 'every day' in this context. To improve, start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

範例: I usually don't spend a lot of money on shoes because I prefer to invest more in clothes. I think it's more important to prioritize clothes since I wear them every day, and they have a bigger impact on my overall appearance.

建議: Your answer has good content but contains grammatical errors and unclear phrases, such as 'they provides' (should be 'they provide') and 'I always SUS that are prioritized and cozy,' which is unclear. To improve, correct subject-verb agreement, avoid unclear abbreviations, and provide clear examples with linking words to enhance coherence.

範例: Well, I definitely prefer comfortable shoes because they provide good support and allow me to walk for long periods without pain. For instance, when I go sightseeing or running, I always choose shoes that are comfortable and supportive, even though fashionable shoes can look attractive.

× Yes, I really like buying shoes, especially comfortable one like sneaker or flat.

✓ Yes, I really like buying shoes, especially comfortable ones like sneakers or flats.

The sentence incorrectly uses singular forms 'one', 'sneaker', and 'flat' when referring to multiple items. Since 'shoes' is plural, the adjectives and nouns describing them should also be plural ('ones', 'sneakers', 'flats'). This ensures subject and object agreement in number.

× I prefer those over high heels because they are much easier to walk in and doesn't cause discomfort.

✓ I prefer those over high heels because they are much easier to walk in and don't cause discomfort.

The subject 'they' is plural, so the verb should be 'don't' instead of 'doesn't' to agree in number. Using 'doesn't' is incorrect because it is singular and does not match the plural subject.

× Recently I purchased a pure of Puma shoes after searching for them for a long time, although they were quite expensive, I decided.

✓ Recently I purchased a pair of Puma shoes after searching for them for a long time. Although they were quite expensive, I decided to buy them.

The word 'pure' is a typo and should be 'pair' when referring to shoes. Also, the sentence is incomplete and lacks clarity; adding 'to buy them' completes the thought. Proper punctuation separates the two ideas for clarity.

× What I usually don't spend a lot of money on shoes because I prefer to invest more in clothes.

✓ I usually don't spend a lot of money on shoes because I prefer to invest more in clothes.

The original sentence has an incorrect structure starting with 'What I usually don't spend', which is ungrammatical. Removing 'What' corrects the sentence structure and makes it clear and concise.

× I think it is more essential to prioritize clothes since I wear them everyday and they have bigger impact on my overall appearance as well.

✓ I think it is more essential to prioritize clothes since I wear them every day and they have a bigger impact on my overall appearance as well.

The phrase 'everyday' is an adjective meaning 'commonplace'; the correct adverbial phrase here is 'every day' (two words). Also, 'bigger impact' should be preceded by the article 'a' to be grammatically correct.

× Well, I would definitely prefer comfortable shoes because they provides good support and allow me to walk for a long period without pain.

✓ Well, I would definitely prefer comfortable shoes because they provide good support and allow me to walk for a long period without pain.

The subject 'they' is plural, so the verb should be 'provide' instead of 'provides' to agree in number. Using 'provides' is incorrect because it is singular and does not match the plural subject.

× For instance, when I go sightseeing or running, I always SUS that are prioritized and cozy, although fashionable shoes can look attractive.

✓ For instance, when I go sightseeing or running, I always choose shoes that are comfortable and cozy, although fashionable shoes can look attractive.

The original sentence contains 'SUS' which appears to be a typo or unclear word. Replacing it with 'choose shoes' clarifies the meaning. Also, 'prioritized' is incorrect here; 'comfortable' fits better to describe shoes that are preferred for comfort.