鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more structured and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and repetition. For example, you can say: "Yes, I enjoy buying shoes and usually do so when I have enough money. However, recently I haven't bought any because of financial difficulties. My mom bought me a pair recently, which I really like."

範例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes and usually do so when I have enough money. However, recently I haven't bought any because of financial difficulties. My mom bought me a pair recently, which I really like.

建議: Focus on clarity and coherence by reducing hesitation and using linking words. Begin with a clear statement, then explain reasons with specific details. For example: "Yes, in the last few months, I have mostly bought shoes online because it is convenient and saves time. I don't have free time to visit stores, so online shopping suits me well."

範例: Yes, in the last few months, I have mostly bought shoes online because it is convenient and saves time. I don't have free time to visit stores, so online shopping suits me well.

建議: Provide a direct answer with specific details and avoid hesitation. Use linking words to explain your preference. For example: "I haven't calculated the exact amount, but I usually spend a moderate amount on shoes. Since cheaper shoes tend to break quickly, I try to find a balance between price and quality."

範例: I haven't calculated the exact amount, but I usually spend a moderate amount on shoes. Since cheaper shoes tend to break quickly, I try to find a balance between price and quality.

建議: Answer directly and clearly, then support with specific reasons using linking words. Avoid hesitation and incomplete sentences. For example: "I prefer comfortable shoes for everyday use because I have to walk several miles to my office. Fashionable but uncomfortable shoes are not practical for me in such situations."

範例: I prefer comfortable shoes for everyday use because I have to walk several miles to my office. Fashionable but uncomfortable shoes are not practical for me in such situations.

× actually my mom, uh, bought me one shoes and I like them very much.

✓ actually my mom, uh, bought me one shoe and I like it very much.

The word 'shoes' is plural, but 'one' indicates a singular item, so 'shoes' should be singular 'shoe'. Also, 'them' refers to plural, so it should be 'it' to match the singular noun.

× last two, uh, few months I always brought my shoes online

✓ in the last two or three months, I have always bought my shoes online

The phrase 'last two, uh, few months' is unclear and should be 'in the last two or three months'. The verb 'brought' is incorrect; the correct past participle of 'buy' is 'bought'. Also, present perfect tense 'have bought' is appropriate here to indicate an action continuing up to now.

× I don't have any free time to go and magazines and, uh, choose many choose there.

✓ I don't have any free time to go to magazines and, uh, choose many shoes there.

The preposition 'to' is missing before 'magazines'. Also, 'choose many choose' is incorrect; it should be 'choose many shoes'.

× I'm prefer comfortable shows.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes.

The word 'shows' is incorrect; the correct plural noun is 'shoes'. Also, 'I'm prefer' is incorrect; it should be 'I prefer'.

× I have to uh, walk some miles, uh, before my uh, office

✓ I have to, uh, walk some miles, uh, to my, uh, office

The preposition 'before' is incorrect here; the correct preposition to indicate destination is 'to'.

× it's so we will not be uh, possible with fashionable and uncomfortable shows, but I allow to.

✓ it's so it will not be, uh, possible with fashionable and uncomfortable shoes, but I allow it.

The word 'shows' is incorrect; it should be 'shoes'. Also, 'we will not be possible' is incorrect; it should be 'it will not be possible'. The phrase 'I allow to' is incomplete; it should be 'I allow it' or rephrased for clarity.