鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is quite expressive and personal, which is good. However, it is a bit long and slightly redundant. Try to keep your answers concise and directly related to the question. Also, avoid informal contractions like 'cause' and use linking words to improve coherence.

範例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes because each pair tells a unique story. I often buy shoes, but only when they are of genuine high quality, as comfort and durability are important to me.

建議: Your answer addresses the question but contains hesitations and some grammatical errors. Try to speak more fluently and clearly. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid filler words like 'uh' and 'umm'. Also, be careful with verb tenses and sentence structure.

範例: Yes, I bought a pair of shoes online a few years ago that were advertised as durable and stylish. However, they were uncomfortable, so I stopped buying shoes online after that experience.

建議: Your answer provides good details and reasons, which is positive. However, some parts are unclear or awkwardly phrased. Try to organize your ideas more clearly and use linking words to improve flow. Also, avoid vague phrases like 'you a bit more'.

範例: I usually spend about 1 to 1.5 million Vietnamese dong on shoes, which is more than I used to. I believe it's worth investing in shoes because I wear them every day. I focus on comfort, performance, and appearance to feel confident and comfortable all day.

建議: Your answer shows your preference clearly, but there are some repetitions and unclear phrases. Try to avoid repeating words and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Also, clarify your meaning and avoid vague expressions like 'find the destiny'.

範例: I prefer shoes that are both fashionable and comfortable, although it's hard to find a pair that combines both qualities. Therefore, I often visit second-hand shops and carefully look for shoes that meet my criteria.

× I do often buy shoes, but I just buy it when it comes to genuine high quality.

✓ I do often buy shoes, but I just buy them when it comes to genuine high quality.

The pronoun 'it' is singular, but it refers to 'shoes', which is plural. Therefore, 'it' should be replaced with 'them' to agree in number with the plural noun 'shoes'.

× I ordered a pair of shoe which advertised durable, stylish and high quality.

✓ I ordered a pair of shoes which advertised durable, stylish and high quality.

The phrase 'a pair of' is followed by a plural noun. 'Shoe' should be pluralized to 'shoes' to be grammatically correct.

× I did a feel comfortable when I put my feet in and yeah, I just gave it wearing it and gave it up buying online.

✓ I did not feel comfortable when I put my feet in, and yeah, I just stopped wearing it and gave up buying online.

The original sentence has incorrect use of 'a' before 'feel' and awkward phrasing. 'Did a feel' is incorrect; it should be 'did not feel'. Also, 'gave it wearing it' is unclear and should be corrected to 'stopped wearing it'. The phrase 'gave it up buying online' is awkward and should be 'gave up buying online'.

× I ordered a pair of shoe which advertised durable, stylish and high quality.

✓ I ordered a pair of shoes which advertised durability, style, and high quality.

The adjectives 'durable' and 'stylish' are used to describe the pair, but in this context, the nouns 'durability' and 'style' are more appropriate to describe advertised qualities.

× I usually spend around 1 to 1 1/2 a million Vietnam ***** on shoes, but you a bit more than I used to spend in the past and I think it's worth investing in the thing I'm putting my feet on every day.

✓ I usually spend around 1 to 1 1/2 million Vietnamese ***** on shoes, but a bit more than I used to spend in the past, and I think it's worth investing in the things I put my feet on every day.

The pronoun 'you' is incorrectly used instead of 'a'. Also, 'the thing I'm putting my feet on' should be plural 'things I put my feet on' to match 'shoes'. The verb tense is adjusted for clarity and correctness.

× I prefer both so it's hard to find a pair of shoes with high quality and stylish design but diff but it it makes me feel much better if I can combine these features in one pair of shoes.

✓ I prefer both, so it's hard to find a pair of shoes with high quality and stylish design, but it makes me feel much better if I can combine these features in one pair of shoes.

The sentence contains repeated words 'but diff but it it' which are incorrect and confusing. Removing the repeated words and adding commas improves clarity and sentence structure.

× So I go to the second hand shop and I just go walk around and choose them really carefully until I find the destiny.

✓ So I go to the second-hand shop and just walk around, choosing them really carefully until I find the perfect pair.

The phrase 'go walk around' is awkward; 'just walk around' is better. 'Choose them really carefully' is improved by using the gerund 'choosing'. 'Find the destiny' is incorrect; 'find the perfect pair' is a more natural expression.